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CrazyPrincessAngelDevil
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since 2000-09-16
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Fitchburg, Ma, Usa

0 posted 2000-09-30 11:28 PM


Dave, I saw you in class
I was shy you were shy
You wouldn't talk to me
I'd admire you
I'd smile at you
Trying to get your attention
You finally talked to me
But then you just said "yeah"
I said he's a freak
Then we gave each other screen names
You IMED me and a smile apeared on my face

Then one day someone told me;
You liked me and I said really?
Then I gave you my # you never called
But I didn't believe anyone
Then I called you and said "hey"
We didn't talk I said "talk to you later"

I noticed you liking me even more
I liked you too and I thought you were cute
I asked you out I was so happy
It didn't work out
But I was willing to try again

On June 24th, 1999
I started dating you
now we were serious
I nearly jumped when you came online

A year has passed
I have enjoyed that year
With a person who gave me time
With a person who let me cry on them
You mean the world to me

Love Always Minna  



You can't find me for love, nor can you have me for love, you can love me for who I am.

© Copyright 2000 Minna Talviharju - All Rights Reserved
StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
1 posted 2000-09-30 11:41 PM


What a beautiful story Minna!! I'm so happy it has worked so well. Best of luck to you both my dear!

And about the e-mail, I just got it the other day for I had not checked it in a very long time...I started it, and it sits in my draft file, awaiting to be finished because Study Hall did not permit me the time I needed.

Luv2LuvYa!
Love Always
~*~Jess~*~


~*~sMiLe! It MaKeS yOuR bUtT ShInE~*~

CrazyPrincessAngelDevil
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since 2000-09-16
Posts 36
Fitchburg, Ma, Usa
2 posted 2000-09-30 11:46 PM


Here's what's been happening.. I've been training for the SO(special olypics).. My arms hurt  , working on my page..
  talk 2 u l8ter   ~*~CPAD~*~


You can't find me for love, nor can you have me for love, you can love me for who I am.

anomaly187
Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284
San Francisco,CA,US
3 posted 2000-10-01 12:36 PM


hey minna there is nothing really else i can say but this is so incredibly beautiful..i'm glad you feel so good..

HUT TWO THREE FOUR!
HUT TWO THREE FOUR!
the clowns on parade
the clowns mascerade
rip off your face
rip off your brain
the clowns on parade
-me

AngelShell
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since 2000-03-01
Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...
4 posted 2000-10-01 12:40 PM


Wow, I'm so glad that things worked out for you in the end.
It can be really hard in the begginning, both too shy to start the conversation...
I'm glad one of you finally did.

Shell.

**I didn't loose my mind it was mine to give away**
~Robbie Williams~

CrazyPrincessAngelDevil
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since 2000-09-16
Posts 36
Fitchburg, Ma, Usa
5 posted 2000-10-01 10:25 AM


This is my last week of training..Until Spring time, then it's again I'm going to the special olypics. Bye Luv ya, Minna  


You can't find me for love, nor can you have me for love, you can love me for who I am.

Dopey Dope
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San Juan, Puerto Rico
6 posted 2000-10-01 12:50 PM


The poem was written very simply. Written how a person would just talk. I liked it a lot. I think the style was great to go along with this. Great job!




I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
7 posted 2000-10-01 02:17 PM


This is such a nice poem, it flowed great and is a good story.  I like it
Child of the Stars
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Posts 1658
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8 posted 2000-10-01 02:21 PM



   Awwww... this was so cute. great job.

     ~Carly

Better days are on the way, my friend, just a ways on down the line.
I believe that just around the bend, everythings gonna be fine...

Isabel Galaxia
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since 2000-06-18
Posts 733

9 posted 2000-10-01 04:20 PM


This is soo sweet!!  I'm so glad this has worked out for you!!  Good luck, keep it up
Bel


Beautiful is empty
Beautiful is free
Beautiful loves no one
Beautiful stripped me
-"Beautiful" CREED

Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
10 posted 2000-10-01 04:51 PM


Minna~~~Its good that you got someone like him in your life to help you...I have my boyfriend too...But he is leaving me for about 2 weeks to go on vacation...I wish you the best of luck with him in the future...

P.S.~~Good luck at the Special Olympics!!!


It TaKeS a MiNuTe To LiKe SoMeOnE, aN hOuR tO hAvE a CrUsH oN sOmEoNe & A dAy To FaLl In LoVe, BuT iT tAkEs A lIfEtImE tO fOrGeT sOmEoNe.

CrazyPrincessAngelDevil
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since 2000-09-16
Posts 36
Fitchburg, Ma, Usa
11 posted 2000-10-06 06:54 PM


well it's all done until the spring my arms hurt but it was worth it. Now peace out Min

You can't find me for love, nor can you have me for love, you can love me for who I am.

Tamma
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Posts 794
In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV
12 posted 2000-10-06 07:04 PM


love it....  

If you love someone dont put their name in a heart,
put their name in a circle, because a heart can be broken
but a circle is continious.



Acies
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Twilight Zone
13 posted 2000-10-06 08:07 PM


I'm glad that everything worked out for you.  Seldom do you see poems in passions that have a "and they lived happily ever after"   type of ending.  You described the situations really well..keep writing

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


CrazyPrincessAngelDevil
Junior Member
since 2000-09-16
Posts 36
Fitchburg, Ma, Usa
14 posted 2000-10-06 09:13 PM


If you guys wanna email me anytime go ahead. I'll be glad to recive emails from all you guys.. Champ00grl@hotmail.com  


You can't find me for love, nor can you have me for love, you can love me for who I am.

Fearless_Angel
Member
since 2000-10-03
Posts 57
Calgary, AB Canada
15 posted 2000-10-06 10:42 PM


Hey Minna:
    I'm really glad everything worked out for you. I have a crush like that! And I wished that things would happen...anyways, beautiful poem with beautiful meaning! Keep writing!
                           Lotsa Love,
                                   Angel

CrazyPrincessAngelDevil
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since 2000-09-16
Posts 36
Fitchburg, Ma, Usa
16 posted 2000-10-07 06:00 PM


Fearless_Angel Welcome to passions!
  This is how people say my name...Meena.. Bye

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