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Can You Give It Up?
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Can You Give It Up? |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
Can you really give it up? Answer me right now. How can you do this to me? You almost made a vow. She comes out of nowhere, After trying to #%@& some guy. She says she likes you, now you like her too. Can you tell me why? If you can throw away what we have, and you forget what you mean to me, I will lock you out of my life, and destroy the god damn key. Open your eyes. This is only lust. But you are about to throw away our well built foundation of trust. I talk to you "Give me a week," you say No I can't wait that long! I can't wait another day! I know I mean a lot to you. Maybe more than anyone has, and I swear if you turn away I will kick your #%@&*$! @$$. |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
excuse me but...HOLY ****!!...this is the best i have ever read from you..this is so great you don't even know...so angry and the emotion is just bursting out of it...just don't kill anyone...but seriously you don't even know how much i loved this... HUT TWO THREE FOUR! HUT TWO THREE FOUR! the clowns on parade the clowns mascerade rip off your face rip off your brain the clowns on parade -me |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
hmmm, I think this is the stanza I liked the most. "If you can throw away what we have, and you forget what you mean to me, I will lock you out of my life, and destroy the god damn key." I really liked that part. It's something that a lot of us have felt at one stage, so angry at someone because they're even THINKING about walking away and leaving you behind...a lot of us would really like to lock them out and throw away the key. There's some very raw emotion in there that is so great to read because you know that it is coming straight from the person, straight from their heart. I liked it a lot. **I didn't loose my mind it was mine to give away** ~Robbie Williams~ |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
As you know profanity is not allowed in the guidelines. Even disguised with symbols. I've closed this thread. Please contact me if you wish to have it reopened for editing. Thanks! |
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