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cutie2005
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 148
Bennett, Colorado USA

0 posted 2000-09-29 11:44 PM


I'm not always into guys,
they are my friends but usually to immature to be more
I have fun with them, like party and so on
Until I met you, For me that part of my life turned around
I loved guys, well, really i loved you
Love is such a strong word to use,
I guess i just new it was you,
From the first time I saw you, I new there had to be something there
As soon as we caught each others eyes, they never looked anywhere else.
But now, something has changed, something bad
I'm not liking it at all right now
I want to know what you are feeling,
I can't believe you think I'm using you..
I never could do that to you, I could never bare thinking of doing that
I wish you new what I want to say,
I wish you didn't think of me that way
I have never used a guy before, so why think I would do such thing to you?
I feel like yelling, screaming
But all I'm doing is crying
I thought you liked me, I new I liked you
What did I do, or what did I not do to not please you.
I hope to one day figure this out,
but for right now, Its a puzzle that's having a hard time fitting together.



If you love someone you would go to the end of the world for them!

© Copyright 2000 Amanda - All Rights Reserved
anomaly187
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 284
San Francisco,CA,US
1 posted 2000-09-29 11:48 PM


well this was good....strange though that you said you loved this guy in the beginning but then you write like at the end..but like has the equivelant of love in this day and time..and the style was good to...diologue in a sense..you know?


I am buried up to my neck in
Contradictionary flies
I take pride as the kind of illiterature
I'm very ape and very nice
-Kurt Cobain

Kandi
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since 2000-06-14
Posts 354
North of Hell
2 posted 2000-09-29 11:50 PM


Wow....oh hun this was so good! I'm gonna guess that it's based on a personal experience b/c you express yourself so well in this poem! I like how it doesn't have a set rhyme scheme or tempo to it yet it still flows so nicely. You did a great job here...I especially love the last few lines. AWESOME job!  
Much Love
Kristin


~*Things you see the way you see them will never be seen again*~

~All that I have found in reason is reason just to not believe.~

StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
3 posted 2000-09-29 11:52 PM


If it is advice you seek, I can't offer much. I can not tell you what to do for the reason that I did use guys. Until I fell in love with my current boyfriend, who is in turn the love of my life. Something tells me I'm going to be repaid in an unfortunate manner for the sins I have commited. Anyways, enough of me, I'm sure this will work out girl! Take care...
Love Always
~*~Jessica~*~


~*~sMiLe! It MaKeS yOuR bUtT ShInE~*~

cutie2005
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 148
Bennett, Colorado USA
4 posted 2000-09-30 12:27 PM


Thanks for posting everyone! Yes this was a personal experiance, happing write now. I wrote it in maybe 10 minutes. I had it in my head, and had to write it down, and thats the words it came out in. I didn't bother to try and correct it or fix it.. not this one anyway. Belive me I could go on about the story of the poem.. But I would bore you all hehe. So I will let this Be Thanks so much for you who all posted!!!
   Luv ya all,
    cutie

If you love someone you would go to the end of the world for them!

Suga_Baby
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since 2000-08-06
Posts 380
Maine, USA
5 posted 2000-09-30 05:50 PM


This was so cute!
I know how it feels, BELIEVE me. If he really thinks that you would do that to him, then is it worth tryig to prove that you are being true? If he cares, he should hear you out and give you a chance. Maybe you should show this to him if you can't get it out of your mouth.
this is my fave line:
"I wish you new what I want to say,
I wish you didn't think of me that way"
Tell him how you feel, you will be so much better to get it out! Best of luck  
-=Suga=-

Wicced_Witch
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since 2000-02-06
Posts 110
Clarksville, TN, USA
6 posted 2000-10-01 02:00 AM


Loved the poem, it was so cute.  I know how it feels.  This guy I dated accused me of using him.  It hurt that he could thinks something like that of me.  Now he wants to get back together, still thinks I was using him. I dont know if i could deal with it though.  A big part of love is trust.  Hope everything works out for the best.

-stephanie

Isabel Galaxia
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since 2000-06-18
Posts 733

7 posted 2000-10-01 04:30 PM


Wow, that's amazing.  I can't think of much advice for you......most of my friend's are guys...but that doesn't help much, lol.  Well, I guess all you can do is talk to the guy huh?  Good luck, keep writing, and smile
Bel

cutie2005
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 148
Bennett, Colorado USA
8 posted 2000-10-01 05:36 PM


Thanks again for replying... The guy i was talking about in the poem.. me and him broke it off.. Well he broke it off with me.. He said it was cuz of the distance, but I think it was more then that... (the using part) Oh-well i just hope to move on.. Thankyou for all your replys!!!
  cutie

If you love someone you would go to the end of the world for them!

Jenn Cirrincione
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9 posted 2000-10-01 06:34 PM


Good luck in your sitch... oh wait you said you broke it off?? I'm sure it's for the best. The best poems come straight off the top of your head no editing needed!
Jenn

Deranger
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since 2000-05-10
Posts 498
Somewhere, between here and there
10 posted 2000-10-01 07:30 PM


AH, the return of the gender defender.

In all fairness, guys are just as cluelest about there feelings are chicks, we just don't admit it as openly...hehe, now you know.

I'd like to tell you life gets easier to understand, but my mother told me to tell no lie...wait till she hears about her cherry tree...hehe



Spreading insanity, one post at a time

"Way back in eighty-seven, where we bust rockstands till we get to heaven"



chic
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since 2000-01-26
Posts 245
yellville, Ar, U.S.
11 posted 2000-10-02 12:02 PM


This was a great poem.  Though I don't use guys...I know how it feels to be used or have someone think you are using them and it really hurts.  I'm sorry I have a thing about going into these psychology 1 on 1 sessions.    Anyway...great poem, it'll work out.

-barb-< !signature-->

"Life is a game and we have to play, but in the end...we all die."-by me!


[This message has been edited by chic (edited 10-02-2000).]

Acies
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12 posted 2000-10-02 04:17 PM


well written!!!  the best thing and only thing for you to find answers is by confronting him about it.  Maybe you should give him this poem and see what he says.  I'm sorry to see that your first experience w/ guys is ending up like this.  Hope this wouldn't affect your judgement of all guys in the future.  keep ya head up girl.  Keep writing

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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