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hoppy
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0 posted 2000-09-29 10:38 PM


Here's a poem i just shot quickly off the top of my head to attempt to describe what it is i feel right now.  Hope someone can relate  


To myself i lied
when i lie awake last night
alone in my room watching
the night spin idily by
knowing that tomorrow held
another lonesome day of
melencoly apathy

To myself i lied
when i told mine own
that you cared
when i said you were
a friend who would be
there, i lied to myself

To myself i lied
when i said you
you were great
thinking you knew it
all, but you are nothing
not close to great

To myself i lied
when i called you friend
i thought i could rely
on you until the end
ow it sickens me when
I see, i've wasted half
my life, on your deceptive
illconcieved reality

I look at myself today
i have to decide
and face the gross fact
that To myself i lied

There's a fine line between genius and insanity. I have erased this line.
-- Oscar Levant

"Death is not the greatest loss in life. The greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live."

© Copyright 2000 Hoppy - All Rights Reserved
anomaly187
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since 2000-06-15
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1 posted 2000-09-29 11:06 PM


hey hoppy..there's nothing really i can say except this was so beautiful,sad, and filled with much emotion.

I am buried up to my neck in
Contradictionary flies
I take pride as the kind of illiterature
I'm very ape and very nice
-Kurt Cobain

StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
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2 posted 2000-09-29 11:10 PM


I loved this one, and as for it just coming off the top of your head, that's fabulous!! I was quite impressed and I totally know how you feel! Keep up the good work.
Love Always
~*~Jessica~*~


~*~sMiLe! It MaKeS yOuR bUtT ShInE~*~

Child of the Stars
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3 posted 2000-09-29 11:14 PM



  Oh sheesh can I relate...this was very well done indeed. me like.

   ~Carly

Better days are on the way, my friend, just a ways on down the line.
I believe that just around the bend, everythings gonna be fine...

LoveBug
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4 posted 2000-09-29 11:31 PM


Hoppy, this is such a sad piece. It's true, there are times that you want happiness so much that you will tell yourself that you have it, even though you really know the truth. If this applies to you, I hope writing this and sharing it with us helped you some.



False gems may shine as brightly as the genuine article, but there are always those who can tell the difference.



Kandi
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North of Hell
5 posted 2000-09-30 12:04 PM


Sorry this is a short reply, but ya know sometimes there are poems where nothing you could say could possibly describe how beautiful they are, and this is one of them.  Awesome job.
Much Love
Kandi

~*Things you see the way you see them will never be seen again*~

~All that I have found in reason is reason just to not believe.~

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6 posted 2000-09-30 12:12 PM


I thought this poem was well written and i did understand the general point of it all. Good job.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
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7 posted 2000-09-30 11:16 AM


You know what?  I liked this poem.  I was imagining you on your bed thinking "To myself i lied", I like when people can do that.  
Virgin Suïcide
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since 2000-08-11
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8 posted 2000-09-30 11:34 AM


I just go with all others: great job, great poem and I know the feeling!! hehe  

keep up the good work and hope to read more soon!!

luvz, VS


All of my life
Where have you been
I wonder if I'll
Ever see you again

~*~*~Lenny Kravitz-Again~*~*~


Tay_face
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9 posted 2000-09-30 03:47 PM


I think this poem was very well put and I understood it perfectly! keep up the good work. buh-bye!
Honeybee
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10 posted 2000-10-01 12:07 PM


~Hoppy~

I'm not a teen, but, do I ever relate to this poem.  Well expressed!  In a sense, this poem is universal, it can apply to both teens and established adults alike. This is the first poem that I have read by you and I am impressed, it is a sad piece of course, but still beautiful in it's own way.  I hope that in writing this poem it has helped bring solace to your soul   ~Hugs~ and best wishes

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee



The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams



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