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~*Meghan*~
Junior Member
since 2000-05-22
Posts 17


0 posted 2000-09-29 06:48 PM


I have been telling my dreams to the door
I thought that maybe it would open up to me
I have confided in my love
because it's been so good to me
I have trusted in my patience
because it waits it's turn in life
             ~*~
I have learned my life through my lessons
because my teacher is the best there ever will be
I have grown up where the green grass grows
because I can run free and play
I have mastered the art of freedom
because so much is given to me
             ~*~
Can you really tell your dreams to the door?
Will it ever open up?
Can you really confide in love?
Is it really perfect?
Can you trust in patience?
Isn't that the key for life?
Can you really learn life from lessons?
Is their a perfect teacher?
Can you really grow where the green grass grows?
I suppose if it's not to high.
Can you really mast the art of freedom?
I suppose if enough is there.
             ~*~
If love is the friend of all people,
and patience is the key in life.
Will you be there like an angel,
and hold me throughout my strife.



© Copyright 2000 ~*Meghan*~ - All Rights Reserved
anomaly187
Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284
San Francisco,CA,US
1 posted 2000-09-29 07:50 PM


I am pretty much speachless on this one..i really loved it.....it's just written so well...

I am buried up to my neck in
Contradictionary flies
I take pride as the kind of illiterature
I'm very ape and very nice
-Kurt Cobain

cutie2005
Member
since 2000-04-30
Posts 148
Bennett, Colorado USA
2 posted 2000-09-29 11:56 PM


this was a great peom!! Loved it.. Hope you hear more!
  Luv ya,
   cutie

If you love someone you would go to the end of the world for them!

sweetstuff101
Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375
OK, USA
3 posted 2000-09-30 02:10 AM


hey nicely done, i liked it, keep writing.

Luv,
sweetstuff


~*~y0u CaN tRy 2 ErAsE s0mEoNe Fr0m YoUr LiFe, BuT iF tHeY rEaLLy MeAnT s0mEtHiNg 2 y0u, YoU WiLl NeVeR 4gEt ThEm.~*~



Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
4 posted 2000-09-30 10:39 AM


I think this is great writing, it made me think.  I really like this, nice work
Acies
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since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665
Twilight Zone
5 posted 2000-10-01 08:06 PM


I agree with Lakewalker.  The questions you asked in your poem actually really made me think really hard.  Very nicely written Meghan.  You are very talented.  keep writing

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


AngelShell
Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...
6 posted 2000-10-01 08:35 PM


Oh I like it...I like it A LOT!!!!

And the title wasn't bad...it came clear towards the end...

Oh wow this poem is so great, I can't get over how it took shape.
I thought in the first two stanza's that you had this life things pretty sussed out...and then all those questions that came spinning out...it really was wonderful.

**life is like an ice cream...the trick is not to get brain freeze**

**I didn't loose my mind it was mine to give away**
~Robbie Williams~

Erin
Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
7 posted 2000-10-01 08:42 PM


The wheels in my head are slowly turning after reading some of this...I believe that there is a perfect teacher out there...I know I had a teacher that to me was perfect...She helped me out more then I think she will ever know...She was more then a teacher, but a friend...You did a really great job with this one...2 thumbs up to you!!!

It TaKeS a MiNuTe To LiKe SoMeOnE, aN hOuR tO hAvE a CrUsH oN sOmEoNe & A dAy To FaLl In LoVe, BuT iT tAkEs A lIfEtImE tO fOrGeT sOmEoNe.

Isabel Galaxia
Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733

8 posted 2000-10-01 09:28 PM


Wow this is great!!  I'm speechless, still.  Well, keep it up okay?  Hasta luego
Bel

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