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A Letter To God (repost)
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A Letter To God (repost) |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ 
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Dear God, I have been hurt in many ways that the one thing I long for is just some happy days. The pain is hurting more & more. And I have an inner feeling that the devil may soon score. I dont like to feel like this and maybe if you help the pain will be free. It is so hard for me to just change to the way I wish to be. All I am asking for is just a little bit of love. I want you to guide me onto the chosen path from above. Sincerly, A growing pain It TaKeS a MiNuTe To LiKe SoMeOnE, aN hOuR tO hAvE a CrUsH oN sOmEoNe & A dAy To FaLl In LoVe, BuT iT tAkEs A lIfEtImE tO fOrGeT sOmEoNe. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Very nicely crafted Erin! I really liked your thoughts in this, and the way you arranged your sentiments ... good ending too, well done!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Thank you Kit!!!You dont know how much you just made me smile with your reply... It TaKeS a MiNuTe To LiKe SoMeOnE, aN hOuR tO hAvE a CrUsH oN sOmEoNe & A dAy To FaLl In LoVe, BuT iT tAkEs A lIfEtImE tO fOrGeT sOmEoNe. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This is a very good prayer Erin. It's nice to know that people still pray I was just wondering though if you ever thought that you already are in the path that God has set for you. I know it's not perfect, but could these bumps in the road have a reason. Like to make you stronger. Nicely done ErinI see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Acire~~~This wasnt for me...It was for a friend who was going through a hard time...I just wrote it as if this person would have wrote it...At least thats how I thought it would be...It was my words coming from his thoughts...I think...You know what I mean???Thanks for your reply!!! It TaKeS a MiNuTe To LiKe SoMeOnE, aN hOuR tO hAvE a CrUsH oN sOmEoNe & A dAy To FaLl In LoVe, BuT iT tAkEs A lIfEtImE tO fOrGeT sOmEoNe. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I think this is great Erin! The words are so meaningful, I love it. And you wrote this for a friend, that makes it even better From your reply: "It was my words coming from his thoughts". I think it's great when people can do that. Wonderful job writing this one! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
"As she counted the spiders as they crawled up inside her".... that's all i have to say. Deep meaning? YEP!....figure it out.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Erin, what a wonderful piece! You are genuinely talented!! Keep it up.I loved how you were able to put yourself in the position. If I do say so myself, I feel as though you put yourself into my shoes. LoL Love to read 'em girl!! Luv2LuvYa Love Always ~*~Jessica~*~ ~*~sMiLe! It MaKeS yOuR bUtT ShInE~*~ |
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Virgin Suïcide Member
since 2000-08-11
Posts 319Netherlands |
AAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHH I'm sorry that I'm replying kinda late  sorry sorry sorry great poem, not so great subject  I really hope this was from your past... luvz ya!!! VS All of my life Where have you been I wonder if I'll Ever see you again ~*~*~Lenny Kravitz-Again~*~*~ |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Jessica~~~Nope not your shoes...Someone that I am friends with out here...Thanks for your reply!!! VS~~~This wasnt about me or my past...It was something I feel in my mind a friend was feeling...Thanks for your reply!!! It TaKeS a MiNuTe To LiKe SoMeOnE, aN hOuR tO hAvE a CrUsH oN sOmEoNe & A dAy To FaLl In LoVe, BuT iT tAkEs A lIfEtImE tO fOrGeT sOmEoNe. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Erin: I'm not a teen, but I decided to visit this forum anyways A well expressed poem from the heart, I am sure that God does hear your important prayer - have hope! I am sure that all of us have written a poem like this to God. Please ignore Dopey-Dope's comment, he is just a vexation to your spiritTake care, Melissa Honeybee The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
Very nicely done! I think you have some real talent!! Great poem, keep writing! Luv, ~*~sweetstuff~*~ ~*~y0u CaN tRy 2 ErAsE s0mEoNe Fr0m YoUr LiFe, BuT iF tHeY rEaLLy MeAnT s0mEtHiNg 2 y0u, YoU WiLl NeVeR 4gEt ThEm.~*~ |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
Very nicely done! I think you have some real talent!! Great poem, keep writing! Luv, ~*~sweetstuff~*~ ~*~y0u CaN tRy 2 ErAsE s0mEoNe Fr0m YoUr LiFe, BuT iF tHeY rEaLLy MeAnT s0mEtHiNg 2 y0u, YoU WiLl NeVeR 4gEt ThEm.~*~ |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Thank yous both for the replies...They really mean alot to me... And Melissa I am trying to do that... It TaKeS a MiNuTe To LiKe SoMeOnE, aN hOuR tO hAvE a CrUsH oN sOmEoNe & A dAy To FaLl In LoVe, BuT iT tAkEs A lIfEtImE tO fOrGeT sOmEoNe. |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Omg that is so sad!! I really hope whoever this was for is okay.....and get's through this. The poem itself is really good, tell him to keep his head up okay? Bel |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Isabel~~~I wrote this about 2 weeks ago...Thats when all this stuff started happening...But he is doing better now...Thanks for your concern and reply!!! It TaKeS a MiNuTe To LiKe SoMeOnE, aN hOuR tO hAvE a CrUsH oN sOmEoNe & A dAy To FaLl In LoVe, BuT iT tAkEs A lIfEtImE tO fOrGeT sOmEoNe. |
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