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Pixie-Babe03
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since 2000-08-29
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Central Maine

0 posted 2000-09-28 05:29 PM




I have never let myself fall for someone,
anyone but you.
But you took my heart
and melted the ice through.

You said it would be better
for things to be this way.
And for listening when you said that,
dearly I did pay.

Now you have met somebody else
my heart is on my sleeve.
I promise I won't beg you,
but please oh please don't leave!


The ice around my emotions,
numbs me from all pain.
From a burning inside my head,
and tears from falling like rain.

It has always been this way,
been this way til you.
Now you have come, melted it away
and made my feelings new.

Oh promise you won't hurt me
my heart is in your hands.
I do not want to drown in tears.
That I could not stand.

© Copyright 2000 Justine - All Rights Reserved
branden726
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1 posted 2000-09-28 05:36 PM


Somehow you make poems sound so great! I like this one a lot. I dont know whats up but hey i hope he chooses you tommarrow ya know good luck.    love always
                     Branden

curlygurly
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since 2000-09-12
Posts 276
USA
2 posted 2000-09-28 06:44 PM


WOW this was really good! you expressed your emotions very well and i think this was a good poem. it's horrible when u get dumped, esp for someone else!
Curlz


"i've kissed the moon a million times, danced with the angels in the sky"
enrique iglesias


Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
3 posted 2000-09-28 07:00 PM


Pixie~~~This one is good!!!You expressed yourself just perfect...Keep up the good work...Dont let this get to you...Eventually it will pass and you will find someone new...Thanks for sharing this!!!

It TaKeS a MiNuTe To LiKe SoMeOnE, aN hOuR tO hAvE a CrUsH oN sOmEoNe & A dAy To FaLl In LoVe, BuT iT tAkEs A lIfEtImE tO fOrGeT sOmEoNe.

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
4 posted 2000-09-29 03:25 PM


Well expressed emotions here Pixie, the poem is great   I really like the end:

"Oh promise you won't hurt me
my heart is in your hands.
I do not want to drown in tears.
That I could not stand."

Dopey Dope
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5 posted 2000-09-29 03:30 PM


I liked this poem a lot. I thought it was wel written, Good job Pixie love. Keep it up



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


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