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Angelwings
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0 posted 2000-09-27 11:32 PM


Virgin caught in devils dance
begotten by his smile
Her values and her morals
shall stand against his force
She always claimed how strong she was
No man could break her down
But one look into his deep brown eyes
her morals began to crumble
With every single solemn touch
her faith in values began to fall
He kissed her gently on her head
she backed away in fear
"Please, stand back don't you understand
this isn't what I want"
I promised not to break down and give myself away
Now I stand here in front of you
body quivering in fear
please don't hate me my dear love
I can't let myself go
I can't let everyone down because honestly I swore
to take care of myself and never let it go
Until the day when you say
those 3 honored words to me

I promise that I love you dear
but that simply will not suffice
I can not be with you now
because my angels will cry
to the heavens above
if my values do not hold up

But as many times as you have said to me
"If you love me.." perhaps just this once
you should listen too
If you love me let me do
what is meant for me to do
Let me hold my values close to my heart
for I will not let them go
No matter how close I dance to the devil
My virginity will not go!


© Copyright 2000 Chelsea Thompson - All Rights Reserved
anomaly187
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 284
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1 posted 2000-09-27 11:37 PM


...different sort of "love" poem...i really liked it...more original

"'I am the the lizard king
I can do anything
I can make the earth stop in its tracks
I made the blue cars go away

Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
2 posted 2000-09-27 11:49 PM


I think that this is one of the most creative poems I have read here...I liked it very much...And I hope to see more like it...Just think as guys as the devils (dont take this offensively guys)...Its like they have this big amount of pressure in them to sweet talk girls into bed...If ever girl thought about it then maybe there wouldnt be so many girls that sleep around...Cause sex is something that is supposed to be special...I think we all know that...Keep up the good work!!!

By the way where are you from in IL???Im in Chicago!
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It TaKeS a MiNuTe To LiKe SoMeOnE, aN hOuR tO hAvE a CrUsH oN sOmEoNe & A dAy To FaLl In LoVe, BuT iT tAkEs A lIfEtImE tO fOrGeT sOmEoNe.

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Angelwings
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3 posted 2000-09-28 01:18 AM


Thank you for your kind words.  I'm in Edwardsville, living at SIUE.  Thank you for reading my poetry and good luck in future writing.
Lakewalker
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4 posted 2000-09-28 07:24 PM


I like this one, it's great writing.  Maybe we'll see more posted from you soon????  
Angelwings
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5 posted 2000-09-28 08:43 PM


Lakewalker~
     I never thought to post here.  I've been posting in Open Forums for a pretty long time now.  I appreciate your kind words good luck in future writing.

Crystalina123
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since 2000-01-31
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6 posted 2000-09-28 11:00 PM


Angel --
I really liked this poem. I think that it is so true. Dancing with the devil . . . interesting thought. The poem really made me stop and think. Thanks.

Crystal

"I'll be your crying shoulder, I'll be the greatest fan of your life."

Angelwings
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7 posted 2000-09-29 01:56 PM


Thank you.  I'm glad this poem made you think.  That's my sole purpose of posting it here.  I just came to college and found out there are more of us out there who need my help to stay strong in the struggle of abstinence.
             Good luck in future writings.
             Chelsea

Crystalina123
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8 posted 2000-09-29 07:56 PM


Chelsea --
I too just went to college. While I don't believe in the whole abstinence before marriage ideal I see alot of my friends struggling with it. It's an issue that weighs heavily on my heart for several different reasons and an issue that I'm still trying to figure out for myself. Thanks once again for stirring my thoughts.


Crystal

"I'll be your crying shoulder, I'll be the greatest fan of your life."
"You don't love her because she's beautiful. She's beautiful because you love

StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
9 posted 2000-09-29 11:38 PM


What a wonderful analogy! LoL I was very amused. I totally agree with you and the way you put this poem into form. It was very very very interesting to see it worded so. You are very talented Angel! I'm so very glad that you decided to post here, I look forward to seeing more from you...
Love Always
~*~Star~*~


~*~sMiLe! It MaKeS yOuR bUtT ShInE~*~

LoveBug
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10 posted 2000-09-29 11:45 PM


"Let me hold my values close to my heart
for I will not let them go
No matter how close I dance to the devil
My virginity will not go!"

You go, girl! I'm so glad that you wrote about this, it's so true! You should always resist pressure and temptation. Remember, it's your life, and your choice. Wait for live-long commitment!  

False gems may shine as brightly as the genuine article, but there are always those who can tell the difference.



Angelwings
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11 posted 2000-09-30 04:09 AM


Thank you all!  As life continues to throw me curve balls, I see it gets harder to dodge them you know.  I've seen alot of my new friends here at school crumble in the light of the whole virginity thing.  And true I'm not as strong minded as I was in the beginning, I still want to be a virgin at least until I'm with the one I truly know I love.  Thank you for the encouragement.  And good luck to all in future writings.
Virgin Suïcide
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12 posted 2000-09-30 05:07 AM


whow, this was just a GREAT poem!!! really really really original!! further...*speechless*

luvz, VS

All of my life
Where have you been
I wonder if I'll
Ever see you again

~*~*~Lenny Kravitz-Again~*~*~


Angelwings
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Posts 222
IL, USA
13 posted 2000-09-30 07:12 PM


Thanks Virgin~
     I appreciate those words SOOOO much!!! I have always been kinda proud of this poem because it was the first poem I wrote after having writer's block for a few months.  Thank you for your comment.  They are much needed.  Do you think I could possibly get this published?  Good luck in future writing!
                  Chelsea

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