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CJM
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0 posted 2000-09-26 10:34 PM


Yeah, I'm not sure why I wrote this, but I did.  Anyone with title suggestions would be greatly appreciated, thanx  

Clarity is something that I "clearly" lack
On rational thought, i've turned my back
Noone to call my very own
Feeling condemned to be alone
Uselessly trying to fill the hole
Spanning across my barren soul
Eternally alone, lived day to day
Destined to drift my life away...


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branden726
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1 posted 2000-09-26 10:37 PM


Hey there this poem is short and sweet and its not always easy to pick a title but i think in this case a good one would be "cleary alone" i took it from e verses in this poem and if u put it together with the poem it sounds great good first post

"what doesnt kill you only makes you stronger"

Lakewalker
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2 posted 2000-09-26 10:40 PM


Well, I like this a lot.  For a title, how about "Confused" (The first letter of each line)?  ANyway, great poem, you should post more!
poe_32
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3 posted 2000-09-26 10:42 PM


I agree with branden, cleary alone would work well as a title for this poem. I think this poem is great, you shouldn't always have a reason to write poetry, sometimes it can just come to you in the middle of the night. But I find writing is a way of dealing with my problems, but thats just me. Keep up the good up, it was great!!!
smiles poe

branden726
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4 posted 2000-09-26 10:58 PM


The only poem i ever wrote that refleceted in my life is called That night all the rest are just my views on how other ppl live life dont always write about feelings it will could possibly kill you writting its not always good to write about life


"what doesnt kill you only makes you stronger"

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