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Dopey Dope
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0 posted 2000-09-26 10:00 PM


Torturing Love:


Oh spite!
Oh hell!
Why dost thou torture me so?
Do I not speak of thee fair?

Tis darkness.
Tis void.
Thine eyes radiate an unescapable hell.
Thy soul spreads an unrequited love.

Oh spite!
Oh hell!
Love me whem I murmur love me.
Hate me never fair woman of heart.

I tread.
I fall.
As if falling was dying,
And to die without thy love.




I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


© Copyright 2000 Pepe de la Muerte - All Rights Reserved
cherish
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swimming in fairy floss...........
1 posted 2001-12-05 08:48 PM


MWAHAHHAHAHHAHAHAA! ive found a poem without any replies ( ive never been the first to reply to your poems...)..not that that makes much of a difference...i just felt like being a stalker.

about the poem?...seriously sounds like youre high...or drunk...or both.
it was pretty melodramatic. not to say i didnt like the sound of it cuz i did.
but reading this and then reading youre new stuff makes me realise how better you are now.
good stuff...and keep writing pepe!

       

  

i luve mi con-tray! lyke a big an brown stetch olan wiv losa sun!



Allan Riverwood
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2 posted 2001-12-05 08:50 PM


I'm... uncertain...
Well, I'll be positive and say you've come a LONG way  

Dopey Dope
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3 posted 2002-06-06 05:27 PM


LMAO oh c'mon! This isn't that bad.
Not like anybody is even going to take their time, come in the archives, think this link is interesting, read the poem, read the replies, and then read this one and say "hey i'm reading this and followed all those steps!"
That'll NEVER happen.
But hey....I have come a long way hehe.

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4 posted 2002-09-23 08:51 PM


Never say never, Javier.  

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

Yu Lan
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5 posted 2002-12-02 06:27 PM


Hey Javi, I came to the archives, thought this link ws interesting, read your poem, and the replies, and when I read your one I said 'hey I'm reading this and followed all those steps..." ahem.. uh... yep..

It's been a long time since I've read one of yours, I don't come here too often now..
Luff,
Lynne

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