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Dopey Dope
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0 posted 2000-09-26 09:57 PM


Yes, you read right! This is the first of the 5th Cycle poems. You should realize a drastic change in styles and aswell I concintrate more on NAMING my poems. For me, titles are EXTREMELY important. Sometimes one worded titles just won't cut it.

3rd Hell Attachment:


It's all gone, this ping pong life.
Faded friends of mystery.
Lasting love never to be.
Enchanted sea, fickle me.

I lost my marbles years ago.
Burning brush to hold so dear.
Shadow dreams filled with fear.
Golden lyre, poor and mere.

Tear me apart from chastity.
Rusted locket of yesterday.
Hating way, there I sway.
I'll come again another day.






I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


© Copyright 2000 Pepe de la Muerte - All Rights Reserved
anomaly187
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1 posted 2000-09-26 10:21 PM


finally the 5th cycle!!!....what an introduction to it!!..this was so great and i see the style has changed...these are such great images man...damn

"'I am the the lizard king
I can do anything
I can make the earth stop in its tracks
I made the blue cars go away

Kit McCallum
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2 posted 2000-09-27 06:49 AM


"Rusted locket of yesterday."

Excellent style and rhyme scheme Javier ... love the descriptiveness!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Allysa
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3 posted 2000-09-27 08:32 AM


Dopey: the long awaited moment is finally here!!!   anyways, I love this. You never answered my questions.   well, bye bye. Love ya, Allysa

Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see.

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