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anomaly187
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 284
San Francisco,CA,US

0 posted 2000-09-25 10:23 PM



I look into a mirror and i see a dead fetus.....
you know i once made love to a fetus,
but never got it's name..
it just looked so tame!!!!!

I'm gonna strike against myself!!
PUT UP SIGNS!!!
SPREAD THE WORD!!!
Anyone want to come??
...have some fun...

decay is in your heart,
i'm swimming in your breast.
learn my name, it's decadance...
nice to meet me, NO TIME TO REST!!!
just doing my best..

One more kiss of deadliness
lead me to your place of rest
I'll feast and dine on your sweet fears
i usually can hear you in your very ears

"'I am the the lizard king
I can do anything
I can make the earth stop in its tracks
I made the blue cars go away

© Copyright 2000 Alexei - All Rights Reserved
Dopey Dope
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Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico
1 posted 2000-09-25 10:30 PM


Anomaly this poem was so damn good. My jaw dropped with the conclusion. I was thinking "if this poem has a crappy conclusion i am going to be mad cuz everything else rocks", but the conclusion finished it off PERRRRRRRFECTLY! This poem was sooooo amazing. I loved every line of it, the style i love. I love the style. AHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!! Ok....well yea, there's my 4 cents of thoughts.




I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
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2 posted 2000-09-26 03:57 PM


I like this too, the ending most of all.  Maybe I'm not as enthusiastic about saying it as Dopey_Dope is, but I still love the poem  

[This message has been edited by Lakewalker (edited 09-26-2000).]

anomaly187
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 284
San Francisco,CA,US
3 posted 2000-09-27 01:07 AM


thanks guys...especially you Dopey...your big paragraph made me feel soo special..j/k..thanks again to both of you


"'I am the the lizard king
I can do anything
I can make the earth stop in its tracks
I made the blue cars go away

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