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Dopey Dope
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0 posted 2000-09-24 12:49 PM


Well out of the 3 I posted up today 2 were short and 1 was longer than usual. So like, read the long one too cuz whats the point in reading just the tiny little 4 liners all the time?


My pain:


My eyes are closed wanting to see the world.
My ears bleed wanting to hear the world.
I'm living in contradiction to life.
A slow death.




I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


© Copyright 2000 Pepe de la Muerte - All Rights Reserved
Erin
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1 posted 2000-09-24 01:37 PM


We all lives our lives in slow motion to death Dopey...At least in my opinion...We are only born to die...Well there is my opinion...Good work though!!!

*Falling in love is when you give someone a piece of your heart, falling out of love is when the piece doesnt fit*

Ethan Halo
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2 posted 2000-09-24 06:25 PM


this made me think of a quote:
"life is a sexually transmitted disease that is always fatal."

i think my fav line is
"I'm living in contradiction to life"
beautifully penned and most intriguing...
much is implied; much remains unsaid.

Everyone's got their demons.
We all got somethin' to atone for.

Jenn Cirrincione
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3 posted 2000-09-24 07:19 PM


Wow. You know I have to be honest... you write very well. Kudos man.
Jenn


"He's mastered the art, of looking sincere, his eyes have a way, of making you stay, don't look in the mirror"- Chely Wright

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