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The memory remains
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The memory remains |
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Caz Member
since 2000-09-13
Posts 133Concepción, Chile |
The memory remains A tear of joy, A tear from you, It's running down my face, 'cause I found you. Everything is great, Everything is fine, Since I found you, There’s no need to hide. But now you betray me, I thought you my friend, Without you I’m nothing, Without you I’m death. Now my hands are bleeding, And you don’t care, My hearth is freezing, As nostalgia spares. I want to move on, I want to forget, But sorrow holds on, And the memory remains. It's been raining since you left me. |
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Virgin Suïcide Member
since 2000-08-11
Posts 319Netherlands |
hey caz!! jup, I know the feeling... great poem! just can't get rid of it... keep up the good work! luvz, VS Experience of survival is the key To the Gravity of Love ~*~Enigma~*~ |
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Caz Member
since 2000-09-13
Posts 133Concepción, Chile |
Thansk VS, well this was just something I was hidding inside, and now I feel much better. The history behind this poem is what encouraged me to begin writting, I just needed a friend to talk, and I guess that friend was my notebook. Well, thanks. Bye. It's been raining since you left me. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Caz~~~You say you were just looking for a friend and it happened to be your notebook...Thats a good way to express yourself...And with that no one can criticize you that way...You opened yourself up and expressed how you were feeling in a good way...Keep it up!!! *Falling in love is when you give someone a piece of your heart, falling out of love is when the piece doesnt fit* |
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Caz Member
since 2000-09-13
Posts 133Concepción, Chile |
Well, note book became my best friend, and now you guys are my second family, it may sound weird but I feel closer to you than to my friends. The story is about a girl, that I loved, and I still love, and we were very close friends. But I began having some problems in my life, and she just walked away. I felt so lonely and betrayed. This happened in january, but the memory keeps killing me. Well, that's my life, hope everything is clear now. Thanks for replying, bye. It's been raining since you left me. |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
that is so sad, I wish you the best of luck. Great poem, keep writing. Luv, SweetStuff ~*~y0u CaN tRy 2 ErAsE s0mEoNe Fr0m YoUr LiFe, BuT iF tHeY rEaLLy MeAnT s0mEtHiNg 2 y0u, YoU WiLl NeVeR 4gEt ThEm.~*~ |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
you express your emotions beautifully in this "'I am the the lizard king I can do anything I can make the earth stop in its tracks I made the blue cars go away |
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Caz Member
since 2000-09-13
Posts 133Concepción, Chile |
Thanks guys, it makes me feel great when I read your replies. It's great that you liked the poem, well thanks again. Bye. It's been raining since you left me. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Caz~~~I just read what you wrote when I replied...I know what you are saying about feeling as if you are closer to the people here then your own friends...I have made a few good friends from this place...And I feel that I could trust them very much... With the girl that you are talking about...Dont let it get to you move on...Its not worth all the pain that you are having...Its hard when you lose someone you love but things will change...You will eventually find someone new and you will be happy...Dont live in the past...Its not worth it... *Falling in love is when you give someone a piece of your heart, falling out of love is when the piece doesnt fit* |
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Caz Member
since 2000-09-13
Posts 133Concepción, Chile |
Hey ERIN, well, I have tried so hard to forget this girl, but I can't. I wrote this poem in january, when everything happened, but I added the last lines the day I posted it. I can't forget her, she has a boyfriend now, she is happy, and I'm still here, all alone. Well, the other poem I wrote, "You found me", was about the loneliness that I'm feeling. It's been raining since you left me. |
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