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Ethan Halo
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since 2000-04-28
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on the roof again

0 posted 2000-09-24 12:54 PM


*Restless*

Shut the door and lock it up real tight.
Stay up and pace the floor all night.
Out the window, i watch the city's lights.
and i wonder if there is any peace

Can we make out there on our own?
Can we still play when our cards are shown?
Can i weather being all alone?
i wonder if the umbrella has room for me

I miss her smile; i miss her eyes.
Think of her when the storms come by...
I promise to say to try not to cry.
and i wonder why she means so much to me

When angels fly to close to ground,
a crash is where their journey's bound.
But if i'm the angel and you bring me down,
why am i trying to clip your wings

I missed my chance says my memory.
And maybe that's the way it had to be.
I hope with you, you take a piece of me.
and i wonder if Me will find its peace

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Everyone's got their demons.
We all got somethin' to atone for.



[This message has been edited by Ethan_Halo (edited 09-24-2000).]

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Dopey Dope
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1 posted 2000-09-24 12:58 PM


I like how you put a capitol M on 'me' like showing ME as a person in itself. That's cool. I liked the poem..



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


Virgin Suïcide
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since 2000-08-11
Posts 319
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2 posted 2000-09-24 05:25 AM


wow! great poem! luvd it!

luvz, VS

Experience of survival is the key

To the Gravity of Love
~*~Enigma~*~

Lani_DarkOne
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since 2000-05-28
Posts 152
UK
3 posted 2000-09-24 07:27 AM


The word 'restless' describes your poem more than well..intriguing reading it..keep posting..

"Controlling my feelings for too long....
And forcing our darkest souls to unfold...
And pushing us into self-destruction...."
*~Muse*~

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