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Dopey Dope
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0 posted 2000-09-23 08:48 PM


Ok yea well this song was one of my frist attempts. I'm not a good song writer, but hey.....if you pay attention to nirvana's lyrics in his bleach album......all it is is this: 4 lines of verse...chorus....4 more lines...chorus...1 line repeated 20 billion times...chorus....done. so thats his way....here's mine....oh well.So here we go:

Ironic:


We're all plastic soldiers
Lost in society.
I see the hate within you.
There's no variety.

You say x2, you love me
But I'm just invisible.
Everything is here.
Everything is dull.

We are what we were.
We are clones of me.
Nothing nowhere is.
Nothing nowhere variety.

You say x2, you love me.
You say x2. you're different.
And in being different
We're all the same.




I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


© Copyright 2000 Pepe de la Muerte - All Rights Reserved
Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
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1 posted 2000-09-23 10:50 PM


I love how well you can put your thoughts into words, this is great.  I like this a lot
StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
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2 posted 2000-09-23 10:53 PM


I liked it. Keep it up  
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~*~sMiLe! It MaKeS yOuR bUtT ShInE~*~

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Lani_DarkOne
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since 2000-05-28
Posts 152
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3 posted 2000-09-24 07:32 AM


GREAT...especially the last 2 lines
"And in being different
We're all the same"
so true..so true...


"Controlling my feelings for too long....
And forcing our darkest souls to unfold...
And pushing us into self-destruction...."
*~Muse*~

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