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Ceinwyn
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since 2000-07-09
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0 posted 2000-09-23 08:48 PM


Mirror, Mirror on the wall
Why once in his arms did my heart trip and fall?
And why in one glance was I willing to give him all
I remember once when Snow White had warned me of such a fate
Mirror, Mirror on the wall
Please give me your reply
To why tears are falling down my face
And why does my reflection grin at me so
Does it know something that I don't?
Did I bite that posioned apple in my sleep
And slowly in my veins the curse began to seep
I wish I knew how I accquired Snow White's curse
Mirror, Mirror on the wall
Why do these feelings course through my veins
Each time I mention his sweet inxtoxicating name...


"Let me be the one you call, if you jump I'll break your fall, lift you up and fly away with you into the night"

~Crash and Burn~

© Copyright 2000 Kristen Brandon - All Rights Reserved
Ethan Halo
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since 2000-04-28
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on the roof again
1 posted 2000-09-23 11:56 PM


quite a masterful piece of work you have penned. the allusion and the way you twist it is magnificent; it conveys the message beautifully. and i really love that rhyme scheme. unique and awesome. keep up the good work.

Everyone's got their demons.
We all got somethin' to atone for.

Dopey Dope
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2 posted 2000-09-24 12:41 PM


I thought this poem was very cool. Keep it up



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


Erin
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since 2000-06-15
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~Chicago~
3 posted 2000-09-24 01:58 PM


This was so amazing...I like the way you used the "mirror mirror on the wall"...Thanks for sharing this one!!!

*Falling in love is when you give someone a piece of your heart, falling out of love is when the piece doesnt fit*

shadydaze
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4 posted 2000-10-05 02:35 PM


another good piece by the lovely ceinwyn.
keep wrinig your awesome poems.

Lakewalker
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On the streets w/ people
5 posted 2000-10-05 04:29 PM


This is very creative, I like how you used another story in your poem, well done!
Isabel Galaxia
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6 posted 2000-10-05 05:40 PM


Hey, this is great!  I especially like the last line "Each time I mention his sweet inxtoxicating name..."  Very creative approach...to the whole thing    Keep it up, keep smiling  
Bel

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