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hopeful
Junior Member

since 2000-04-19

Posts 27

0 posted 2000-09-21 09:41 PM

This is short and simple it doesn't say much. But I just needed ur guys view upon it so i know to do futher to it or not. I made it up in like the past two seconds literally. so let me know what I can do more to it to help it out. I'm not very good at this stuff. I'm still learning all the techniques so all comments good and bad are appreciated.

They say the best relationships start from the best friendships.
Yet I will never be able to show you what they mean by that for no matter how hard I've tried you've never let me.

Wet
Member

since 1999-07-25

Posts 60
Brentwood, Tn

1 posted 2000-09-22 01:16 AM

Hi, welcome to poetry. It is all up to you what you want to do to it. If it was me, I would expand my thought and add more. How do you feel? Tell me more. Good Luck! And Welcome!

Kit McCallum

Administrator

Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

2 posted 2000-09-22 06:54 AM

I think you have some beautiful thoughts here Hopeful.

We have another Forum called "Teen Explorer" where Craig or Poet deVine would be happy to assist in helping you expand further on this. Just go to the main forum screen, and go to "Teen Explorer". Feel free to post this there, for some further assistance!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

3 posted 2000-09-23 05:30 PM

you have a good start here. But if you are the type that has to sit for a while to come up with a poem, like me, take your time on it. Some people are able to just cough out a poem, but some aren't. That shouldn't make you feel abd about yourself. Poems are the doors to ones soul....sit for a while and finish it. Sometimes it'll take days, don't force yourself to finish it right away. Hope to see you finish this poem soon

As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

Ethan Halo
Senior Member

since 2000-04-28

Posts 793
on the roof again

4 posted 2000-09-24 12:15 PM

Kit has a good suggestion about going to Teen Explorer. Poet DeVine is a great person to work with.

however you choose to finish it, let it flow from within. otherwise it's not you. i do hope you share it when it's done!

and take a shower. i always come up with mad flows when i sit in the shower. just have a towel ready beside a pen and paper!

Everyone's got their demons.
We all got somethin' to atone for.

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