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jytree
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0 posted 2000-09-20 02:28 PM


We all npe how it feels to fall in love it is great untill the point of falling out of love and it is just that FALLING from cloud nine will leave some people in the hosptial well I just feel that I need to say what I can in this poem I am about to write be honest and true to yourself never let anyone think you don't deserve a hot in life because one you bellow down it is a fight to receive you pride back well listen well and I hope you like,

Pricked be a thorn,
Scared for life,
We love so much we forget,
Forget life is passing us by,
Yet when your in a love strikken paridse,
You forget everybody,
Everyone means nothing to you just spending day to day with the one you love is the only thing that makes you go on in such a crazy world.

But when the time come will you be ready to give it all up,
It happens without warning,
Without love you fall apart,
Fall into a hole where new suprises await you,
Regreat upon regreat hearing in you mind it is your fault,
The eccoing ring of your heart breaking just keeps playing over in your mind driving you mad.

You stop and think why should you go on you lost to much to ever really live so why don't you just take the gun and finish the just they the break up started,
Or will you live and suffer in misery,
Well look at it like this you can nip the problem at the bud or wait it out and pray the you might bloom once again.

This is for my old girlfriend just to say that I love her and that I finally bloomed


Chosen to live a joyful life,
Blessed with a huge heart,
Day to day I live the life,
Live the life brought to me,
So much unshared love yet to giv

© Copyright 2000 Michael Jay vaughn - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2000-09-20 03:03 PM



  I loved this. Way to bloom....

  ~Carly

Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll land among the stars.

StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
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2 posted 2000-09-20 07:32 PM


You did an excellent job with this...and bloom, you did (and well I might add)Keep it up I much enjoyed this one. Reading it was a pleasure
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Erin
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3 posted 2000-09-21 12:47 PM


Jytree~~~Its good to hear that you "bloomed" as you put it...

Everyone means nothing to you

I spend all my time with my boyfriend or the computer...My best friend barely speaks to me anymore...I dont know if its out of jealousy that I spend so much time with him or what...I dont know what I am even telling all this for...Ohh yeah cause of what you wrote...

Anyways good way to get your feelings out!!!


*Falling in love is when you give someone a piece of your heart, falling out of love is when the piece doesnt fit*

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