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Jacman
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0 posted 2000-09-20 01:13 PM



I did it again.
I said the word,
the nasty never word.
I hurt myself today
and I felt my heart break.
I saw it as it ripped
from my chest and
die as our love did.

Yes, I did it again.
I said I never would.
Now nothing can I do
for I'll never love again.

jason

I'm not concieted...I'm convinced.

© Copyright 2000 Jason Allen Carmen - All Rights Reserved
Kit McCallum
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1 posted 2000-09-20 01:25 PM


Oh Jason ... the pain in this powerful verse feels deep, you've expressed this well. Hugs to you, my friend.  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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2 posted 2000-09-20 03:09 PM



Holy amazingness. I loved the way this was written...good work!


   ~Carly

Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll land among the stars.

StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
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3 posted 2000-09-20 06:41 PM


My dearest Jason, what a wonderful and timely verse. I don't even know what to say you ae the best and truy talented. I wish you the best in everything that you do. Hugs and kisses...
Love Always
~*~Jessica~*~
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If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm.



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Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
4 posted 2000-09-21 12:32 PM


Jason~~~Why would you wanna do that???I mean we all get our hearts broken but that makes me want to hear the word somewhat...To hear that someone actually cares enough about me to tell me that...Dont give up on love...One day its gonna make you happy!!!

*Falling in love is when you give someone a piece of your heart, falling out of love is when the piece doesnt fit*

L.A&A
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since 2000-09-21
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5 posted 2000-09-21 03:56 AM


O.k....I'm confused....oh, and by the way....I'm watching you.  Oh, yeah, sorry about that yellow streak on you're car.  It was just too tempting.




Jacman
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since 2000-06-27
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Dwight Il, US
6 posted 2000-09-21 11:54 AM


Kit, thanks and thanks for the hug.

Carly, I'm glad you liked it.

Jess, how can I not love you.  You are way to nice to me.  Thanx!!

Erin, great advice.  I only seem to get hurt when it comes to matters of the heart.  I think I do it myself most of the time.  Oh well!

L.A&A, Ok, your confused?  Who the heck are you?  Oh, and if you are watching me be careful.  You might not like what you see.

Thanks everybody!!!!

jason

I'm not concieted...I'm convinced.

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7 posted 2000-09-22 01:29 PM


The pain, i felt. The pain i feel is felt. Oh well. good poem



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


mystique
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since 2000-08-01
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8 posted 2000-09-23 10:43 AM


Hey Jay,
Boy, you do have a way with words. You and I are in the same boat, hon.  But thats why our friendship probably will help me with this and I hope I can help you too.
I like this also.  You always seem to amaze me.

mystique

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