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Jenn Cirrincione
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0 posted 2000-09-19 09:12 PM


Swarms of people overwhelm me.
Your face stands out in a crowd of men and women.
Twinkling eyes, crooked smile,
Can you breathe with me??
You talk, and I try to listen.
I pray you'll stop invading me.

I could make you hate me.
Then, I could be alone and free,
Once again in a new state of unhappiness.
Your eyes are sweet...
All I can do is feel unworthy.


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1 posted 2000-09-19 10:17 PM


That was very original. I like the way you write.

What ever happens so let it happen unlees you don't want it to happen.

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2 posted 2000-09-20 11:23 AM


Jenn,
Very confusing poem. Not sure what you want? Or is the ever present invasion an unwelcome luxury that you feel you cannot be without?
Maybe I misinterpreted.

Thomas

Let not a word go unspoken,
A thought go unheard,
Let not one heart be broken
Dream of a perfect world.

-Th.A.P.

Jenn Cirrincione
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3 posted 2000-09-20 06:52 PM


Well, thank you for your compliments and comments. I appreciate them. I wrote this a while ago, and yes I was confused. Hmmmm... It's hard to put into the correct wording. He was a sweet talker, and a lot of times I wish we were still together. Maybe with some new relationship guidelines, or something. At times I was soooo happy, it went to bliss and back. But he always pushed me too far, or teased me, or what not. He had me making really extreme descisions, and that is hard for me to do, especially after only a month of knowing one another. But yeah... I was very confused, as you may be able to tell.
Thank you again.
Jenn


"He's mastered the art, of looking sincere, his eyes have a way, of making you stay, don't look in the mirror"- Chely Wright

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4 posted 2000-09-20 07:48 PM


Loved it Jenn! Maybe I understood it because I am confused and confusing myself. Maybe I just need to shut up. haha...anyways, do keep it up, I much enjoyed this.
Love Always
~*~Jessica~*~
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~*~sMiLe! It MaKeS yOuR bUtT ShInE~*~

[This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 09-20-2000).]
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