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~sugarpie313~
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since 2000-09-14
Posts 375
Maine, USA

0 posted 2000-09-19 07:47 PM



Would he think i was obsessed
if i told him how i felt,
i'm hoping it will come out right
my voice is shaking can he tell?

I knew i was in over my head
from the first time i met him,
he was everything i'd ever want
but the chances of there being an "us" were dim.

I finally gathered the courage
to make that dreaded phone call,
there was a silence on the other end
i knew i had hit a brick wall.

Then his voice broke the silence
as he said "i'm in great awe of you",
i'm so glad that you called
because i feel the same way too!

I know that future reference
the light isn't always THAT dim,
but i can't imagine where'd i be
if i chickened out and never told him.

© Copyright 2000 Valerie - All Rights Reserved
curlygurly
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since 2000-09-12
Posts 276
USA
1 posted 2000-09-19 08:06 PM


once again awesome poem. i wish i had the courage to tell the guys i like that i like em, but i have a problem with putting myself down so i never think they could possibly like me. excellent poem, very well written, great usage of imagery!
Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
2 posted 2000-09-20 12:12 PM


Awwww that was so sweet...Nice job!!!I dont know how you were able to come out and tell someone how you feel...I usually get all quiet...I dont know though...

*Falling in love is when you give someone a piece of your heart, falling out of love is when the piece doesnt fit*

~sugarpie313~
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since 2000-09-14
Posts 375
Maine, USA
3 posted 2000-09-20 09:31 PM


Hey thanks guys for replying    The weird thing is, i have never told a guy i liked them... they have always liked me. But if i wanted to then i would no doubt about that! i'm not shy at all!!   Well thanks again guys!! *L*

~Much Love~
~sugarpie313~ a.k.a Valerie

~*Always make time to stop and taste the pop tarts*~

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
4 posted 2000-09-20 09:40 PM


I liked your word choice here, love the poem   Great job on it!
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