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Dopey Dope
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0 posted 2000-09-18 07:46 PM


This was written because it was.It's not meant to be good, it's not meant to impress, it's just there. It has a story behind, a sucky one. I wish it didn't happen, oh well!

Elegy of Parting:


I'm seeing you try to hide from me,
But you can't hide your soul.
I want you to take me away with you.
I want to be whole.

You sit and wait to die all day.
I see you in utter pain.
I wish I could trade places with you
But I can't, so I live in vain.

Your my life, O faithful friend.
I'd like to begin again
to the infant stages of life.
I wish your pain would mend.

Sleep tight and journey well.
Live on to the next moon,
But don't worry friend
because I'll join you soon.


I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


© Copyright 2000 Pepe de la Muerte - All Rights Reserved
Child of the Stars
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1 posted 2000-09-18 08:55 PM



  Hey Javi. Screw not tryin to make this good. Everything you do is good. I loved it. And I wish I knew the story behind it...musta been a sad one...

  ~carly

Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll land among the stars.

Kandi
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2 posted 2000-09-18 10:03 PM


Yup another masterpiece Dopey...I know u said it wasn't meant to impress, but it impressed my none the less.
I gotta say, I don't always agree with what you say but I truly admire the way you say it...and I mean that with as much respect as possible so hope you take it as a compliment.
Anyways, this one was interesting. I dug it.
~K~


~*Things you see the way you see them will never be seen again*~

~All that I have found in reason is reason just to not believe.~

Erin
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3 posted 2000-09-19 09:32 AM


Dopey~~~Wow...This poem reminds me of someone I know perfectly...

You sit and wait to die all day.
I see you in utter pain.

What a choice of words...You have talent my friend...Keep up the good work...I look forward to reading more by you!!!


*Falling in love is when you give someone a piece of your heart, falling out of love is when the piece doesnt fit*

Dopey Dope
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4 posted 2000-09-19 04:11 PM


Kandi dont worry i took that as a compliment. I never ask anybody to agree with me, in fact, my friend fernando here constantly disagrees with me. It's a rare occasion, and pratically a miracle, if we agree on something. So yea, i took it as a compliment due to you showing a lot of respect. I love respect, it's something I command as a necessity and give in return.

adios!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


Allysa
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5 posted 2000-09-19 04:24 PM


Dopey: I love this, it's awesome, YOU RULE!!! *Anyways* can i ask you a few questions? okays, here I go:
1)does bubble gum REALLY loose it's flavor on the bed post over night?
2)what would chairs say if they could talk?
3)Do flowers actually sing and dance like they do in the movie Alice in Wonderland?
4)Why do I only get asked out by juvinille delinquents?
5)Why do people lie?
well, if you can answer those, i'll be pleased. hope i brightened your day in a small and crazy way. Love ya, allysa

Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see.

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