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Suga_Baby
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since 2000-08-06
Posts 380
Maine, USA

0 posted 2000-09-18 03:03 PM


Excuse me, Sir...
Do you have a Band-Aid,
For my wounded heart?
Have you seen the missing piece,
That was stolen from this part?

Look at all my Band-Aids--
Clear, fluorescent, Scooby-Doo,
Leopard print, Mickey Mouse,
And glow-in-the-dark ones, too!

And the holes-- there are so many,
Can you count them all?
Can you fill them in, repair them,
And still catch me when I fall?

Can you be my first love,
And warm my frigid hands?
Or will you leave another gash,
Like every other man?

The wounds and holes are far too much,
For my tortured heart to take.
And with just one more of either,
I fear my heart might break!

© Copyright 2000 Sara - All Rights Reserved
Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico
1 posted 2000-09-18 06:16 PM


Well, i liked the message of the poem. I thought it was very cute!!! keep it up!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


Kandi
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since 2000-06-14
Posts 354
North of Hell
2 posted 2000-09-18 07:06 PM


I was really impressed with this. I love how it sounds so cute and free and laid back when really there is a seriousness to the words. Excellent work. Keep it up  
Much Love
~Kristin~

~*Things you see the way you see them will never be seen again*~

~All that I have found in reason is reason just to not believe.~

Erin
Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
3 posted 2000-09-18 08:03 PM


Wow I like this one...You have quite an imagination...Keep up the good work!!!

*Falling in love is when you give someone a piece of your heart, falling out of love is when the piece doesnt fit*

~sugarpie313~
Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375
Maine, USA
4 posted 2000-09-19 07:41 PM


Oh my Sara this is wicked cute!! i love it!!   i don't usually come up with cute stuff, but you can call mine cute if ya want!! hehehe... See ya lata Girl  

Love,
Valerie  

Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A
5 posted 2000-09-20 07:09 AM


Wow..I'm impressed...I loved the whole play on the band-aids.  The idea and the way you carried it through were great.

Jeremy

Curse not upon love, for it is the greatest of great things. Be it not love that curses you....but thy lack thereof. -J.D.H.


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