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The Game (a repost) |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ 
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The GameI never did really love you, |
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UNC STAR Member
since 2000-06-19
Posts 67Hinesville,Ga,USA |
That was tight. I enjoyed that very much. AWESOME. What ever happens so let it happen unlees you don't want it to happen. |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Hmmm, she has a darker side? Ah, to hell with initial misconceptions…hehe… Life is a game, so it’s fair to say love is one as well? “…But life is a game!” I said. “No it’s not!” Says one of my teachers. “It is the greatest game of them all!” I argue. The teacher often pauses at that point…thinks for a moment, then follows with the standard teacher-response when faced with an intellectual question. “Alex, go to the office!” “DOH!” I always say… In-wishing-school-was-less-patchy, THERE IS NO SPOON! Spreading insanity, one post at a time Singing, "If i die before i wake..." |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
UNC~~~Im glad that you liked it...The first time I posted it alot of negativity came out of it... Deranger~~~LOL you got in trouble for saying life is the greatest game of all...But I would have to say monopoly is...LOL Thanks for the replies both of you!!! *Falling in love is when you give someone a piece of your heart, falling out of love is when the piece doesnt fit* |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I simply hate the message of this poem. Really i do. I like the way it was written, i think it was kick ass. The poem was written VERY VERY well. That is why i dislike the message and feel a great deal of hatred towards it. You did well! See, i detest the fact that people play games with peoples feelings. I hate it, i think its rotten, i think its cruel, and i think it goes along the lines of sending somebody to hell. BUT I am not saying anything to YOU as a person because for all i know, this could just be you writing in the perspective of a person who did this to YOU. I know how writers tend to switch off on perspectives. The poem was great though, I dislike it with a great deal amount of like.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
aaahhhhh....the wonderful "game" I have played this one...played this one well in fact. For 5 years now, been voted MVP and won lots of awards...hmm...until I fell in love. Now, things are different. But I must say the game is interesting and hard to find players who aren't involved. (if that makes sense) I guess I've played with too many hearts, and one day I shall receive my punishment; for that I am regretful now that I have fallen in love; each day I hope it isn't my one and only who plays me as I played so many gullabe others. now that I have babbled on forever about senseless nothing, I shall go eat some more and add to my hippo poem! Anyways, I loved this one Erin! You did well, very well! < !signature--> Love ya bunches!Love Always ~*~Jello~*~ If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm. [This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 09-18-2000).] |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Well Dopey...Thanks for the reply...You know what...This was written in my perspective...I was with someone who I thought really did care for me as me...But I was wrong...He was with me for my best friend...And I sorta wrote this poem in the way he thought then in my opinion... His thoughts: I never did really love you, I just used you for all that you had. Now your saying I broke your heart, but its just to bad. I can also play, play this what you call a game. But then I broke you heart, and its just a shame. My thoughts: First you moved, and then I happened to score. If you didnt like it, why did you keep coming back for more? But then you quit, you just quit the game I was playing. And then what came out of it?, just those hurtful words you started saying. Its just to bad, that I was the one who won. So put away the pieces, the game is over and done. You understand...Thanks for the reply!!!Im glad you liked it!!! *Falling in love is when you give someone a piece of your heart, falling out of love is when the piece doesnt fit* |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
What did you do that for Jello???You posted a reply when I did now I have to double post... I think that everyone has played this "game" whether they know it or not...But everyone has... LOL you need to post that poem of yours already... *Falling in love is when you give someone a piece of your heart, falling out of love is when the piece doesnt fit* |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well star, i think playing with peoples hearts ISNT cool. I think its quite cruel. I think playing in general is just a waste of time. To all those who play, may it come back to you. I have NEVER played. I will NEVER play. Now see, i may find some girl willing to kissy kiss one night at a club, but in no way would i be playing with her HEART. The moment you get deep into somebodies thoughts and emotions, that is when you have to think "is this game worth the pain?".....playing is no fun for the one being played on, and if it's fun for the person playin....then heck, I think that goes along the lines of me sending you to hell hahaha..... this is directed to nobody in general, just to everybody in general. But i do love you all!! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
ok well, now that I have to defend myself... (Erin I apologize for taking up the space) < !signature-->Dopey~At the risk of sounding like a hypocrite, I agree playing is plain messed up, and I can not say that I am very happy to have done it. I think it sucks and I have been played too, and can't believe how much regret was in my heart. Let me tell you something, and I'm not trying to fight with you at all. You said that it was directed at no one specifically...well, that was a lie. You directed it at me. I'm not saying I didn't deserve it...but I think that when you say that, you should know all of the story. I am not being rude in any way shape or form-but you did direct it at me by addressing me specifically. I'm not offended because personally, I could care less; you exist only on the computer to me, so your opinion of me is insignificant. You don't know how I live my life everyday or how I feel. And until you do, then you can't really say much. I just thought that I should say a few things since you were taking a stab at me and basically saying how much of a horrible person I am... (and again, Erin, I'm sorry for the space taken up) If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm. [This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 09-18-2000).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Once again you have taken what I say into your own personal hands. Nope, wasnt directed to you, i don't lie. So sorry to have dissapointed you but this just happened to be directed to nobody and everybody. The general public of players, playettes, and those whose their wrath have been faced by. See I make no judgement upon you because, like you said, you exist only in text. I care not about anything you do, so frankly don't think I do. NO offense at all star, but you flatter yourself too much. You are right, the whole story would have to be known for me to make a judgement, but i don't want to hear any stories. I don't want to hear anything. I just want this world to be as peaceful as possible, and the lesser amount of hypocrits, murderers, political leaders, radicals, terrorists, and yes, PLAYERS AND PLAYETTES, the BETTER. Down with emotional battering, down with heart playing. DOWN I SAY! To hell with those who think it's all a matter of fun and games and give excuse that "it's the age to do so" as a validation for their actions. THIS IS NOT DIRECTED TOWARDS YOU, SO PLEASE CHILLZZZZZZZZZZzzzzzzzzzzz. Understand that I AM NOT ATTACKING YOU...i am stating a beautiful opinion that everybody should have. adios! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
OK OK enough already Jello and Dopey!!!I heard enough (actually read enough) LOL...You guys are silly...Just dont be using my space for your arguements...Next time use e~mail...LOL *Falling in love is when you give someone a piece of your heart, falling out of love is when the piece doesnt fit* |
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Virgin Suïcide Member
since 2000-08-11
Posts 319Netherlands |
You broke You hurt You tease and please me You act You play You say it's a game... hehe, just a part of one of my poems...just cam up in my mind while reading this... luvz, VS Experience of survival is the key To the Gravity of Love ~*~Enigma~*~ |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
ERIN, i like this, i think it's well written, but i pretty much agree with a lot of what Dopey said. it's annoying, and confusing to play or be played with. bye bye. Allysa Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
VS~~~Girl you have a good mind!!!I dont know how you could come up with a little poem while reading one...I like it... Allysa~~~This is a game that is played thoughout heads and hearts...I never (from what I think) played this game before...It was played on me...And I worded it as if it was me... Thanks for the replies you two!!! *Falling in love is when you give someone a piece of your heart, falling out of love is when the piece doesnt fit* |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
Don't hate the player; hate the game. Great poem Erin, I retired myself from the game because I just plain suck at it. jason I'm not concieted...I'm convinced. |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
Erin, Used to be a major player of the Game. But I was wrong, as fun as it was. What turned me into a player was getting played to many times by other people, so I understand where you're comming from. Great poem. Thomas Let not a word go unspoken, A thought go unheard, Let not one heart be broken Dream of a perfect world. -Th.A.P. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Jason~~~I dont hate the game I hate the players!!!Cause while playing (actually not playing) the game I had my heart crushed into a million tiny little pieces...Not really a million pieces...You know what I mean...Its just a game that is played in life... Thomas~~~For some reason people say they havent played the game...Or at least wont...But all have been probably a part of the game...Without knowing it...The worst part about playing it is that you never know when its gonna happen to you.... Thank yous both for your replies!!! < !signature--> *Falling in love is when you give someone a piece of your heart, falling out of love is when the piece doesnt fit* [This message has been edited by ERIN (edited 09-19-2000).] |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I agree with Dopey, cause I do think that the poem is well written, but the message is bad --- just in that sense. BUT!!! I am not gonna judge Erin for this, cause we are not all perfect. As Jesus said in the bible, "let the person who hasn't sinned cast the first stone" I think we all are not perfect and that we all have our own faults. Like Jessica, I too played the game all my life. I can't even tell you how many girls I've been with. I'm not gonna expound on that. You already know what I mean. Then just dump them like dirt. To the point wherein one of em committed suicide 4 days after we let each other go. You know how painful that experience is? So much guilt was on me. I learned my lesson after that. Everyone deserves to be respected as much as possible, even those who don't respect you. That is my belief. Well, i just got played by the Erica (Acire backwards). Now, I know the feeling of being played or used. And it is not something I would like to feel again for the rest of my life. I am sick of this datng game. I have sworn to myself that I would never open up to anyone again. Cause the first and only time I did this, I got burned. ERIN --- well written poem though< !signature--> I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR [This message has been edited by acire (edited 10-19-2000).] |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
I am starting to believe that alot of you think that I am trying to send out a message...That its good to do this...Well Im not...I was letting out my feelings as do all of you in your poems...So dont think that I am trying to do anything with this but get replies... ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Erin --- Please read my other reply again cause it says that I'm not judging you for this. And I do know that you are just expressing your feelings on this poem. And there's nothing wrong with that. I agree. I just hope others would look at it in that context though. You know what I mean? talk to you later  WEIRDO I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
Great poem!! Altho I have no idea what you are writing about feels like, I get a pretty good picture of it from your words. I think this was very well written, nice job!! Keep writing, I look forward to reading more from you soon!! Much love, Priscilla< !signature--> ~*~ YeStErDaY iS tHe PaSt, 2mOrRoW iS ThE fUtUrE, ToDaY iS a GiFt, ThAt'S wHy We CaLl iT ThE pReSeNt. ~*~ [This message has been edited by sweetstuff101 (edited 10-19-2000).] |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Nice poem, but crappy subject. I have read your replies so I know this isn't about yourself. That is the only reason I like it because it takes tallent to write from someone else's perspective. But just for others sake who are going to read this and be like" cool that's me!" Doing this to someone isn't cool. I have always been the relationship type of guy and when this B.S. game gets played I get hurt. There is no need for the games. If you like someone, try to make something out of it. If you don't, let the person know, don't drag it out. The saying "Nice guys finish last" is true for both sexes, and it isn't fun always finishing last. Just something to think about. Later Keoni |
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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
Ahhh, I decided I'd put my input into this very talked about game....nice work Erin, you know you've done well when this many people reply.. :.) In any event, ah yes, the "game." I've never been one for rules...nor am I a team player....so, I made up my own game. hee hee (I play by myself.... LOL j/k) No, honestly, who says you have to play the game? It's one of these oddities of society that I guess I will never understand. In any event, I'm a strong believer in "this life karma" ("what goes around comes around")...you hurt people now, you'll get hurt later. So, Dopey and all others who hate those who have tugged the heartstings only to be revealed as puppetmasters - their due is coming. :.) Just smile knowing that. :.) Vreni |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
Ouch poor guy! *L* Well-written though, keep up the good work |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
oops sorry!!! [This message has been edited by ERIN (edited 10-20-2000).] |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Sweetstuff~The game of love...Thats what this subject is on... Keoni~The people that think it is cool to play with peoples hearts need help...Feelings and all that other stuff is put into it... peanogrl~LOL You made me smile when you said you made up your own game...That was a good one...I know what you mean when you say about the puppetmasters... Suga~Poor guy?!?!?He did this to me so I played the game right back at him...By getting back at him in my own way...We were close friends that hooked up...But to my knowledge he was with me to get with someone else...And he got something he didnt want...Me not talking to him... To all who have replied thank you...I really appreciate... And to all those (if anyone else reads it) dont judge me because a poem was written in someone elses perspective...And if you are gonna dont bother replying...I dont feel like typing the same thing over and over... ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
this is a really great piece i enjoyed very much reading it and i hope you don't get hurt by this game my friend. Love Jeremiah I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
When i first started reading i hated it truthfully but then i got down farther and farther and realized that it had meaning great poem im glad i read it all "what doesnt kill you only makes you stronger" |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well hello again and id like to post another reply on this if i may do so....if not...ill do it anyway...SO HA! Anyway the message of this poem was well hated by many which was erin's purpose. WELL DONE! I don't know a living soul who would have liked this to be done to them. As for the man that did this to Erin, to hell with him! HA! I'm one of those guys that if i see a movie, book, article, or anything of the sort about cheating and such I throw/burn/tear it apart. I'm very passionate about my hatred against people/things like that. Anyway, Erin you have done a great job in reversing your perspective from being the one played on, to being the player. A message to all the players/playettes.....smile now but i'll make you cry later. MWhahahahaha!!! A message to all the regs and people who have been played on.....chill cuz you'll recooperate and live on. No worries. "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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