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X_me_X
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since 2000-08-18
Posts 37


0 posted 2000-09-17 10:36 PM


you are so sad
and i cant make it go away

you are so mad
and ur rage is here to stay

you are depressed, your whole life is shaken
you are stripped of ur sweet smile, ur whole world is forsaken

ur warm smile is no longer there to brighten up my day
the happiness in ur heart is long gone much to my dismay

whatever it takes i promise you i will do
to once again see your beautiful smile anew

wherever u want me i promise you i will go
to once again see your face light up and glow

i know its hard for you, i know its alotta pain
to lose a family member whose sweet touch u wont regain

buti just want you to know that i love you
and since ur love helped me make it thru
i know that mine shall do the same for you

~All is forgiven but NEVER forgotten~

© Copyright 2000 X_me_X - All Rights Reserved
Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
1 posted 2000-09-17 10:43 PM


x_me_x~~~This was good!!!Sounds like whoever this family member is...Is close to you...Good job!!!Sounds like this person is really special...Keep up the good work!!!

~*If I was to die & could be 1 thing I would be a tear born in your eyes live on your cheeks and die on your lips*~

Nikkisweet
Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 183
Tx, Dallas
2 posted 2000-09-17 11:05 PM


This is really good, sometimes a friend needs to know that you're there.  I wrote a similar poem...It's called for my friend.  It is basicly the same thing you wrote except in different wording...Good Job


~Guys are like stars,
there are millions
of them, but only
one can make you dreams
come true~

X_me_X
Junior Member
since 2000-08-18
Posts 37

3 posted 2000-09-17 11:11 PM


Hey Erin thanks for the reply!

but this poems about my best friends' pain, not mine, i wish i could have taken the pain away from him to myself.

UNC STAR
Member
since 2000-06-19
Posts 67
Hinesville,Ga,USA
4 posted 2000-09-17 11:15 PM


I really liked that poem! Keep it up!!

What ever happens so let it happen unlees you don't want it to happen.

Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico
5 posted 2000-09-18 06:49 AM


This was a cute poem. I liked it.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


Allysa
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since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden
6 posted 2000-09-18 03:53 PM


love this poem. looking forward to reading more.

Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see.

Kandi
Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354
North of Hell
7 posted 2000-09-18 10:21 PM


Wow I really dug this poem...last year when I met my best friend she was so alive and happy and always had a huge smile for everyone...now its like her life has gone down the drain and she always is depressed and sad...I wish I could do something for her b/c I miss the way she used to be...so I felt this one, really I did. GREAT job, I hope you showed this to your friend b/c I'll bet it'd mean a lot to them. It was so sweet of you to write this. You must be a great friend  
Much Love
Kristin


~*Things you see the way you see them will never be seen again*~

~All that I have found in reason is reason just to not believe.~

~sugarpie313~
Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375
Maine, USA
8 posted 2000-09-19 08:25 PM


Hey, I just lost my Aunt to Cancer like a week ago this past sunday. It was hard but i know she is in a better place. I love this poem and it is everything my friends keep saying to me only it's better   hehehe
you did a WONDERFUL job, feel free to contact me on icq or thru e mail. ttyl

~*Always make time to stop and taste the pop tarts*~

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