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fire and water (i think youll find the moral)
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fire and water (i think youll find the moral) |
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emptyness Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 95mobile,Ala,USA |
and eternal battle < !signature-->raging over a thousand years divided by there differences warring over sovrenty of the world fire rages over the land taking no prisners a pure destructive force burning, devouring, barbaric water strikes in covert bursts creating a chance for lives to escape the great evil holding back the flames into the night a never-ending service to the lives of the world each gaining and losing ever-precious ground eventually you would think they would end the battle but the war goes on once fire was asked what it was about and the same question was asked to a water and they both gave the same answer they are diffrent than us is this really a good reason to war and kill i dont think it is how about you? "scribere iussit amor" love commanded me to write [This message has been edited by emptyness (edited 09-17-2000).] |
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UNC STAR Member
since 2000-06-19
Posts 67Hinesville,Ga,USA |
That was a real good example of imagery. Nice What ever happens so let it happen unlees you don't want it to happen. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This is a very thought-provoking poem Emptyness ... very nicely written, with excellent imagery, well done!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Diddo on what Kit said, I thought this was great. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this a lot. A battle with fire and water, i like it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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