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Don't make assumptions. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI 
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Do you see that girl, The one sitting over there? Yes, she is the girl with a twinkle in her eye and a crowd surrounding her. Now I ask you. Will you travel forward in time? Yes, you answer. You now see that girl. Could it be that this is the girl from before? Bloodstains cover the pillow... A bloody knife lies on the floor... She holds her bloody wrist and her head lowers. How could this be, you ask? She has it all! Happiness Friendships. Look into her eyes and tell me what you see. She lifts her head and you gasp in horror. Your horror comes not from what you see... Rather what you do not see... Her gaze was empty. You looked into her soul when you saw her eyes. Her soul is empty; sold to no one for popularity and false happiness..... Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll land among the stars. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Holy! Ok this just scared me. I don't know, the message of the poem was cool, but mamasita.....this was scary. I hope you're not suicidal or nothing. You better not be, or i'll just write a poem about....uhh...i don't know. OK anyway, just happy!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Hello…Nobody  Hmmm, wonder if this falls under the category of “Glorfing Suicide”? I don’t believe so, but what do I know? Yes very creepy…just like Altoids… It’s a shame how few people understand you…take care my dear…. In Wishing there were more to do…well at least… THERE IS NO SPOON! Spreading insanity, one post at a time Singing, "If i die before i wake..." |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Man I am speechless!!!What a poem...Such good work...I have to agree with Dopey...This was a little scary...A different style that I like too!!!Keep it up... ~*If I was to die & could be 1 thing I would be a tear born in your eyes live on your cheeks and die on your lips*~ |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Thanks..I liked it too hehe...and I don't slit my wrist...I'm not suicidal...I'm just deep...*shrugs* oh well...thanks again... Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll land among the stars. |
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