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Dopey Dope
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0 posted 2000-09-17 01:26 AM


Revolution:


Revolution!
Our blood drips down the quiet streets of dictatorship.
We couldn't stand working without sufficient pay,
Or being lashed by un-payable taxes.
After being treated like yesterdays rotten food
We became exausted with hatred towards
Those who thought of us as dogs.

Revolution was cried out, and acted out, and paid for.
We, the people of the republic wanted a newlife,
But instead all we received was a faster death.

To my future commrads and revolutionaries,
I say that even though we have lost our fight
We fight on.
And though we die,
We live on till the true republic is made.

May the outcries of revolution blow in the wind
And the dictators quiver in fear to the thought
That one day the fight will be won,
And our purpose would have been served.
Revolution!





I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


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Kit McCallum
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1 posted 2000-09-17 09:36 AM


Very powerful Javier! You've left me with visions of a strong individual standing at a podium and reciting these words to a fevered crowed! Really well done!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Deranger
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2 posted 2000-09-17 03:10 PM


Mmmm, inciting chaos….riots…yummy…

This definitely has a rebellious flare to it,   makes me want to run to the nearest stadium and start ripping up chairs!  

Well done…just remember, the revolution can never be won because…

THERE IS NO SPOON!


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