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To Daddy Love Always Minna
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To Daddy Love Always Minna |
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CrazyPrincessAngelDevil Junior Member
since 2000-09-16
Posts 36Fitchburg, Ma, Usa |
Where'd you go that night? I don't understand why'd you left me Sometimes I think of you I was so lucky to have you But the cancer crawled up to your brain Killed you and you were dead We all want you back We all miss you alot We didn't want you to leave. You come back into my dreams And your not ill your healthy I cry and say why he can't really be alive The doctors are helping me They are going to do a test to help my legs You always said "never give up on them" I am not cause I want to walk I am going to another school next year I'll be a 12th grader scary But before I leave High School I want to show you, That I can walk That I can do for myself. You'll be happy I'll be happy Everyone will be happy You probably see me having fun You see me doing everything Dad I miss you Why'd you leave that one cold night? Was it to cold or something? I still don't get why you didn't stay until Christmas. Dave's leaving this year We have a good love now It's going to run like a river You helped me find his love Now my love is going to run He's been a good help I don't want to leave him But I don't like that school Besides if I went back he'd leave anyway. ~*~Fairy Princess~*~  |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
did this really happen?..if so that is terrible..losing someone you love is always one of the hardest things you can experience..but this was a beautiful poem and emotions flow through out it...one thing.. "I was so lucky to have you But the cancer crawled up to your brain Killed you and you were dead" it just sounds rushed and that you are trying to hide the emotion in it..take more time with imagary to show that he was really great and that he didn't just die..but you did in a way also. "'I am the the lizard king I can do anything I can make the earth stop in its tracks I made the blue cars go away |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
A poem filled with sadness and emotion...But your dad is up there watching down on you...Helping you through all that you are going through... You probably see me having fun You see me doing everything And you worded this part perfectly...I guess you do agree that he is watching down on you...Take care... ~*If I was to die & could be 1 thing I would be a tear born in your eyes live on your cheeks and die on your lips*~ |
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CrazyPrincessAngelDevil Junior Member
since 2000-09-16
Posts 36Fitchburg, Ma, Usa |
thank you for the replys img src="http://netpoets.net/img/ic15.gif" Min < !signature--> When YOU leave someone in love, friendship, death ect.. You leave footsteeps in their hearts [This message has been edited by CrazyPrincessAngelDevil (edited 09-30-2000).] |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I liked this, I could feel the emotion behind it. Great poem! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
...well that's weird, it didn't move this to the top of the forum... |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Oh minna, hunnie, I'm so sorry! I know how hard it can be at times. Just be strong and know you'll see him again. And Minna, if you are able to walk I know that he will be so very proud of you girl!! He's watching you and he knows you can do it. He is going to hold your hand the whole way through. I know you can do it babe. Luv2LuvYa! Love Always ~*~Jessica~*~ p.s. give Lucy a hug for me ok?  ~*~sMiLe! It MaKeS yOuR bUtT ShInE~*~ |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Omg this is soooooo sad!!! I feel so bad for you! I'm sorry thing happens to people..I can't understand it myself. It was a great poem though. All I can think to tell you is good luck, keep writing and smile......hasta luego Bel |
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