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FlipAngel
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since 2000-04-11
Posts 46
Prior Lake, MN, USA

0 posted 2000-09-15 10:16 PM



Tears, oh tears
why do you fall
surely you know you're
not welcome
Damn you
Oh dreadful tears
why must you fall
And sting thy tender cheek?
Oh
you wretched tears
to thy lips must you go?
How bitter is your loathing taste
as it makes its travels
into thy fragile heart
But tears
oh tears
if to thy cheek, and to thy lips, and
to thy heart must you go
please grant me this one wish...
revive my weary soul.


~*Yesterday is gone, let go of the past; tommorrow will bring new hope to grasp*~

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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico
1 posted 2000-09-16 02:49 AM


Looks like you are writing in Elizabethan. I liked it. I liked the "oh tears"....i loved that part. I just liked the poem in general.

good work!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
2 posted 2000-09-16 08:20 AM


Very nice FlipAngel, I enjoyed the flow and wording in this piece. Great work!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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