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~sugarpie313~
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since 2000-09-14
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Maine, USA

0 posted 2000-09-15 05:30 PM


When you're not around, I can escape into my own little world
It's not one I particularly enjoy, but it's not one that I entirely hate,
Then when you come back around again, it's different
I come out of my own little world, and into a whole 'nether state.

Your world is so full of life- the bright and vivid colors
Mine would be the total opposite of that completely,
I paint mine up to be so wrong, what most people wouldn't imagine
Is that I'm not really like that, and I don't do it deliberately.

One of these days I'll realize that I can't always do this
I can't do what seems like jumping from place to place,
I need to stick with what will suit me the best
And stay with the familiar faces.

Then comes the day that you will be leaving forever
And I will be told that I cannot enter your world anymore,
I'll be forced to return to my dark and damp self-created atmosphere
Where nothing exists but the darkness within that you cannot ignore.

I realize that I cannot stay in here forever
And people will start to push me away because of it,
I try and make my world a little more like yours but it is hard
And I will try my best to conquer the worlds, and let me not be split.


© Copyright 2000 Valerie - All Rights Reserved
Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
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1 posted 2000-09-16 08:04 AM


As this is your first official poetry post (I saw your first post in Q&A) ... I wanted to officially welcome you!

Welcome to Passions SugarPie!  

We are very happy you have decided to join our community of poetry friendship. We look forward to having you share your efforts with us and please keep in mind that we are very supportive of each other. The pleasure you receive from reading comments on your work is the same pleasure others need by receiving your comments on theirs. This is a rule that all poets here follow. We invite you to join the family!

This is a wonderful first post. There seems to be a lot of thoughts and questions between the lines in this poem.  I hope to read more of your poetry and your responses to our wonderful family of poets! (check your e-mail for a special message)

Best wishes,
/Kit

Lani_DarkOne
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since 2000-05-28
Posts 152
UK
2 posted 2000-09-16 08:19 AM


A very intriguing poem...when I read it again it's great...I know what you mean about creating your own little world..
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