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Erin
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0 posted 2000-09-13 10:34 AM




~*Beauty*~


As I look into the mirror,
its beauty that I wish to see.
But I cant have it my way,
so you just have to accept me.

I cant change the fact,
that I was created this way.
And I have to live like this,
day after day.

I just wish I could,
change things on my face.
Changing the sizes,
and putting everything in the right place.

I wont change a thing though,
there was a reason I was made this way.
So before you say anything,
think of the words that you want to say.


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~*If I was to die & could be 1 thing I would be a tear born in your eyes live on your cheeks and die on your lips*~




[This message has been edited by ERIN (edited 09-13-2000).]

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TAP2
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since 2000-06-29
Posts 211
Morris, Il USA
1 posted 2000-09-13 12:12 PM


Erin,
Go check out the 3rd stanza of 'The Truth of Being Human' again. It is your poem in different words. You are a beautiful and talented person, never let anyone say or convince you otherwise. Very uplifting poem and it shows the strength of character that you have in your heart, and at the end of the day that's all that matters.

Thomas A. Plemmons

Let not a word go unspoken,
A thought go unheard,
Let not one heart be broken
Dream of a perfect world.

-Th.A.P.

Erin
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2 posted 2000-09-13 12:31 PM


Ummm Thomas...Where is The Truth of Being Human???

Thanks for the reply...I really appreciate it!!!


~*If I was to die & could be 1 thing I would be a tear born in your eyes live on your cheeks and die on your lips*~

Lakewalker
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3 posted 2000-09-13 02:55 PM


ERIN- this is so good!  At first I thought it was another "I want to change myself because I'm so ugly and the world hates me and I'm suicidal" poem, and those a good too, but then I read on and found that it was about accepting yourself.  At least that's how I read it    Anyway, I like it!
Erin
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4 posted 2000-09-13 05:45 PM


Lakewalker~~~Wow you really thought of my poem in a different way...No I do not think I am ugly and I am no where near being suicidal...There are things on me that I would love to change...But I wont do that...I was made this way for a reason...And God doesnt create anything ugly...So I have no reason to change myself...And yes I do accept myself...

Thanks for the reply...Sorry about going on and on!!!


~*If I was to die & could be 1 thing I would be a tear born in your eyes live on your cheeks and die on your lips*~

Ender
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Yuma, AZ USA
5 posted 2000-09-13 06:02 PM


A very good subject.  Beauty is very open.  I look forward to more poems from you.  Keep up the good work

*Blonde people are normal. Everyone else is just strange. -Ender*

Erin
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6 posted 2000-09-13 06:07 PM


Thanks for the reply Ender!!!

~*If I was to die & could be 1 thing I would be a tear born in your eyes live on your cheeks and die on your lips*~

LoveBug
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7 posted 2000-09-13 09:01 PM


Oh Erin, this really hit home with me. I often look in the mirror, and I hate what is looking back. I'm so glad that you have the all of the self-esteem that you need to face the world. Keep up the great work!  
UNC STAR
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since 2000-06-19
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8 posted 2000-09-13 11:54 PM


Your poem is awesome. I like the way you tell to accept ourselves. Loved it. A+.

What ever happens so let it happen unlees you don't want it to happen.

Erin
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~Chicago~
9 posted 2000-09-14 01:08 AM


Lovebug~~~You shouldnt hate yourself. Cause looks arent anything, its whats on the inside. You think people go out there and make friends for what they look like? I highly doubt it. They look for what counts and thats who you are. I think we all have been there at one point in our lives where we look in the mirror and dont like what we see. I know I have.

UNC STAR~~~Im glad you liked it!!!

Thank you both very much for the replies!!!


~*If I was to die & could be 1 thing I would be a tear born in your eyes live on your cheeks and die on your lips*~

Jeremy Halstead
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since 2000-06-01
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Morris, Ill. U.S.A
10 posted 2000-09-14 02:55 AM


Erin...I really could have used yer confidence when I was younger....I was a total dork... I'm glad you can accept yourself for who you are, I think more people need to.

Jeremy

"Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade."

Virgin Suïcide
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since 2000-08-11
Posts 319
Netherlands
11 posted 2000-09-14 04:17 AM


heya ERIN!!! great poem!!! makez me happy again (even More!!!!)


luvz ya!!!!
VS!!

I dream about how it's gonna end
Approaching me quickly
Living a life of fear
I only want my mind to be clear...
~*~silverchair, suicidal dream~*~

Erin
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12 posted 2000-09-14 09:11 AM


Jeremy~~~I think we all have been in that position at least once in our lives...I wrote this cause sometimes I just dont feel like I am pretty...But I know that I am whether or not I look it...Thanks for the reply!!!

VS~~~Thanks for the reply...Im glad it made you happy!!!


~*If I was to die & could be 1 thing I would be a tear born in your eyes live on your cheeks and die on your lips*~

Jacman
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since 2000-06-27
Posts 291
Dwight Il, US
13 posted 2000-09-14 11:01 AM


Erin, I am running out of positive adjectives and adverbs to describe how great your poems are.  So here is a random selection of what I have left.  Its really gooder!   Seriously though Beautiful is empty, beautiful is free, beautiful loves no one, beautiful stripped me.(Creed)  So great writing as usual.

jason

p.s.  I really like your signature.  Is that origional?  Because if it is, I give you mad props for that too!

Just as soon as I belong, then it's time I disapear...
-Metallica-

Erin
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Posts 2527
~Chicago~
14 posted 2000-09-14 04:21 PM


Jason~~~You are a peach!!!LOL You are so sweet...Thanks for the reply...

And no I thats not my own signature...I got it off a website a long time ago!!!!


~*If I was to die & could be 1 thing I would be a tear born in your eyes live on your cheeks and die on your lips*~

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