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Isabel Galaxia
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since 2000-06-18
Posts 733


0 posted 2000-09-12 05:45 PM



~This is dedicated to Dopey, consider this as an explanation to the response I wrote to your poem, but don't worry it's not directed completely towards you~

I wonder that you cannot see
The thoughts running constantly through my head
Or is it that you simply chose
To ignore them instead
I wonder what you'd think
If you could hear the words my subconscious has said
Maybe you've never has such thoughts
At night while lying in your bed
Why did I eat so much today
Why do I loose control
Tomorrow will I pay
For just eating food as a whole
I no longer wish you to understand
That phase has passed
Things are no longer as easy
As were in my past
Do you feel I'm drifting
Further and further away
Do you really care
If it is that way
Is it as though
There's suddenly a barrier dividing life in two
Not so equal pieces
Me vs all of you
At this moment
I shed no tears from my eyes
Maybe I'm "too proud" for that
Ha, like nobody cries
I've noticed lately
Not many of you still try
I believe you have tired of my ways
Maybe you'd like to think "this is all just a lie"
This is not an angry accusation
I'm merely describing a bit of how I feel
I leave it up to you
To believe whether it's real
But I know one thing is
This pain that's inside
Rarely ever do I try
To put on a happy face and hide
What's the point now
Tell me, my dear
Maybe if you looked really hard
Would it be crystal clear
And now I leave you
With a single thought
Am I so horrible, stupid, insignificant, wrong
Or am I blindly following a path
Away from my pain, the path often sought?

- I wrote this late last night and perfected it sometime this morning, I think it's pretty self explanatory.  Thanks for reading!   Hasta luego mis amigos
Bel




Beautiful is empty
Beautiful is free
Beautiful loves no one
Beautiful stripped me
-"Beautiful" CREED

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curlygurly
Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276
USA
1 posted 2000-09-12 06:19 PM


Hey Bel! i love the poem. i know how you feel, i get the same way sometimes. but you just gotta think about those who love you. they don't care if ur a size 2 or 12. i hope that u'll think about me when u remember that all people aren't anorexic looking!-curlz
HaVoK
Junior Member
since 2000-09-06
Posts 31
DETROIT, MI
2 posted 2000-09-12 08:59 PM


This may sound REALLY goofy...But I like girls with problems...
It's like I have something to work on...
I don't know..It's wierd..
The only girls I've ever been attracted too both mentally and physically have some...help me out here... problem... But I don't meen it like that... It is to me because I like to help and try to "solve" it...Anyway... Yeah



Isabel Galaxia
Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733

3 posted 2000-09-13 04:39 PM


Thanks for reading.....come on Dopey you gotta read this one amigo!
Curlz- Thanks girl, yeah I understand the anorexic looking thing, some girls are just skinny!  
Havok- Are you implying(spell?) I have a problem?   Should I assume you like me then?  
Gracias hasta luego
Bel


Beautiful is empty
Beautiful is free
Beautiful loves no one
Beautiful stripped me
-"Beautiful" CREED

Erin
Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
4 posted 2000-09-13 05:49 PM


Isabel~~~You expressed your feelings really well in this one...I give you props for writing this (you are going through this right)...You had alot of courage to write about it and I admire you for that...I wish you the best in life...Keep up the good work...

~*If I was to die & could be 1 thing I would be a tear born in your eyes live on your cheeks and die on your lips*~

Ender
Member
since 1999-12-08
Posts 200
Yuma, AZ USA
5 posted 2000-09-13 06:01 PM


A very good poem.  I enjoyed reading it.  You made the words flow so well.  Keep up the good work

*Blonde people are normal. Everyone else is just strange. -Ender*

Dopey Dope
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since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico
6 posted 2000-09-13 08:49 PM


A poem dedicated for little ol' me?!?!?! HURA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Either way, I still like the idea that a poem was dedicated to me. Makes me feel all these wittle tiny tingles in my tummy!! HURA! thanks!

nice poem too!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


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