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luvnkris
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0 posted 2000-09-12 10:18 AM


Your touch....

The feel of your hand upon mine
Not quite holding, but resting there still
Electric
The brush of your arm as you reach for your coke
Sends my inner emotions swirling

Any touch, accidental or real
Send electricity through my body
In intense moments
When all I can feel, see, hear is you
My heart races
My hands sweat

Even now thinking of your touch
My stomach fills with butterflies
I wish you knew what you did to me
So you'd do it more often




* everyone is special, if you look hard enough to find it *


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1 posted 2000-10-12 06:05 PM


This is sweet.  What a way to express your feelings towards someone.  I hope you gave this to him.  Great write and please keep sharing.  

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2 posted 2000-10-12 09:49 PM


I know exactly how you feel!! This is the most annoyingly-cool feeling in the world. When i get it..it wont leave!! I like do a dance at my desk in class cause my stomach is all weirded out. I hope you get this guy!! Maybe you SHOULD let him know what he does to you...you never know what might happen!
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3 posted 2000-10-12 09:52 PM


great poem........what is this "electric touch" you speak of? hahaha...... either you live in a really cold place and his feet were rubbing against some carpet......ooooorrrrrrrrrrrrr its some symbolic thing. I don't know hehe. but great job!



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luvnkris
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4 posted 2000-10-13 10:44 AM



hey thanks for your replies ppl's!
yes this guy is my boyfriend!! and he's the best!
and everytime i'm with him how i'm feeling is the best!!
i'm so happy i found him, he's my soulmate i am so sure of it!!
anyways, luv yas
Jo
xoxoxox


* never live a second without being grateful for all you have around you*



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5 posted 2000-10-13 11:25 AM


ahhh....how sweet   beautiful piece, very unique and original.

salma

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6 posted 2000-10-13 03:32 PM


Ah yes, you felt a spark   Great writing, I like how you got your feelings out.

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7 posted 2000-10-13 03:37 PM


Ah, I know this feeling!   You're very lucky to have someone that makes you feel this way, and even luckier that he is there to touch you. You describe it well.  

False gems may shine as brightly as the genuine article, but there are always those who can tell the difference.



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