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Virgin Suïcide
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since 2000-08-11
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0 posted 2000-09-11 05:09 PM


Just break me
Hurt me
Again

Do it to me
Slap my face
Again

Heard it all before
Seeing it all
Again

But I'm used to it
Everything
Again

Not gonna get over it
This time I won't, not
Again

But I'll break you, hurt you, slap you
Make you feel the pain I feel
Again

Til you know what you did to me
And make you cry, like I did
over and over AGAIN


I dream about how it's gonna end
Approaching me quickly
Living a life of fear
I only want my mind to be clear...
~*~silverchair, suicidal dream~*~

© Copyright 2000 Virgin Suïcide - All Rights Reserved
StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
1 posted 2000-09-11 06:10 PM


WOW!! I have sooo been there!! I'm sorry about this my friend! Hope you're ok! you got the powerful point across in so little words, that's hard to do, but you did it wonderfully. I commend you on your work. Keep it up!
Love Always
~*~Jessica~*~
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[This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 09-11-2000).]

Dopey Dope
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2 posted 2000-09-11 06:20 PM


I liked the style it was written in. Good job



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
3 posted 2000-09-12 12:33 PM


Til you know what you did to me
And make you cry, like I did
over and over AGAIN

Virgin~~~WOW!!!Show them they way you feel and how you want them to feel...Let this person feel the pain that you once felt...

Just break me
Hurt me
Again

Dont let this person get the best of you...It sounds like that in the lines I copied above...Show them that you are stronger then they really think you are...

Keep up the good work...And Im glad to see that you are posting more here!!!



~*Each day is a treasure box from God, just waiting to be opened*~

Virgin Suïcide
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since 2000-08-11
Posts 319
Netherlands
4 posted 2000-09-12 10:21 AM


you know, I was like crying when I wrote this (and the other one)... I'm like SO mad...mostly at myself actualy... cuz I always do the same things... so I have to be punished or sumtin... dunno what to do with my life anymore, but I cant treat ppl the way they treat me, cuz I know how bad it feels and I don't want anyone to feel that way... I just want the ppl who did it to me, to feel the way I did... or so that they can imagine... and think before they do...

luv, Virgin Suïcide...

I dream about how it's gonna end
Approaching me quickly
Living a life of fear
I only want my mind to be clear...
~*~silverchair, suicidal dream~*~

Allysa
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In an upside-down garden
5 posted 2000-09-12 03:32 PM


this one is intense. I love it. Read it this mornin', but had to go, so I write now. Well, anyway, what's up? I'm gonna email you, alright? Allysa

Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see.

Virgin Suïcide
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since 2000-08-11
Posts 319
Netherlands
6 posted 2000-09-12 03:39 PM


yeah sure it's allright!!
and thnx for ya reply!!

luv, Virgin suïcide!

I dream about how it's gonna end
Approaching me quickly
Living a life of fear
I only want my mind to be clear...
~*~silverchair, suicidal dream~*~

HaVoK
Junior Member
since 2000-09-06
Posts 31
DETROIT, MI
7 posted 2000-09-12 04:26 PM


Want ME to make him feel pain???...It would be no trouble at all... And besides...I don't think that guy deserved a chick like you..


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