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luvnkris
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since 2000-08-31
Posts 144
Perth, Australia

0 posted 2000-09-11 09:46 AM


Lost...
His eyes
Distant, daring not to meet mine
Looking here, there, where
Everywhere but at me
His eyes wander
Following illusions behind me
Only there in his mind
Clicked off from reality
Denying all help
He's lost


I wrote about my bf. Lately he has seemed a bit distant and his mind seems to be somewhere else. He denies that anything is wrong, but i can tell that something is up.
I'm feeling helpless though, because i feel like i can't help him!  

anyways, hope you liked it.
Luv Jo
xoxoxox



* reach into that heart of yours, don't ignore the dream *

© Copyright 2000 Jo - All Rights Reserved
Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
1 posted 2000-09-11 01:54 PM


I liked this poem a lot, you did a great job of describing how he is.  I can't really help you with any advice, but I hope everything works out for you soon
Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
2 posted 2000-09-11 02:46 PM


Luv~~~I wrote a poem similar to this about my boyfriend asking for advice and it got out of control to where I had to lock it...This is good though...And I wish you the best with him!!!

~*YoU cAn CoMpLaIn CuZ rOsEs HaVe ThOrNs Or ReJoIcE cUz ThOrNs HaVe RoSeS*~


Ender
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since 1999-12-08
Posts 200
Yuma, AZ USA
3 posted 2000-09-14 05:32 PM


What great words used. I love the style

*Blonde people are normal. Everyone else is just strange. -Ender*

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