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anomaly187
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 284
San Francisco,CA,US

0 posted 2000-09-10 02:47 PM


hey dope i read that poem of yours Nothing and i just had a sense of nihilism..well here you go...and ppl please reply..it is much appreciated
  

to kiss me with my
                         own red lips
                         to bloom like a flower
                         then wither and die
                         I am your nothing
                         I am denial
                         I am acceptance
                         I am your tears

                         to cry and fear
                         of once myself
                         to fall apart
                         and be crumpled by years
                         I am your nothing
                         I am confusion
                         I am anger
                         I am your remorse

                         And maybe if i found a way
                         and maybe if i stopped caring
                         i would forget
                         you would forget
                         we could go on as past disappears

                         I can fall into the deepest well
                         i'll drown myself
                         i'll forget all about
                         alone in the dark
                         just as i wished
                         no concerns here
                         no people that push

                         to just ignore and
                         find ways to explore
                         to find myself
                         among everything else
                         I am your nothing
                         I am your hate
                         I am your love
                         I am nothing



Now night arrives with her purple legions
Retire now to your tents & to your dreams
Tomorrow we enter the town of my birth
I want to be ready. - JM

© Copyright 2000 Alexei - All Rights Reserved
Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
1 posted 2000-09-10 02:50 PM


Anomaly~~~This is good!!!I dont know if I read this the first time you posted it...But I think I would have remembered it...But oh well...This was good...Keep it up!!!

~*YoU cAn CoMpLaIn CuZ rOsEs HaVe ThOrNs Or ReJoIcE cUz ThOrNs HaVe RoSeS*~


Dopey Dope
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since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico
2 posted 2000-09-10 03:08 PM


Anomaly, you are a great writer. I am so happy you posted this up specifically so i could read it. Take a glimpse into more of your work. I loved it, like I loved everything else. You remind me of myself when i was in 9th grade. I was so depressed, I was so messed up when I was in 9th grade and that's why I started to write. Im not sayin you're messed up, i'm sayin..your style reminds me of mine, but much better.

Wanna know a little secret that I dont mind anybody knowing on this forum? Here we go buddy.....the reason why I started to write poetry at first was to IMPRESS THE LADIES! I started off by reading THE NORTON ANTHOLOGY OF MODERN POETRY editions 1-3....dude those books EACH are like more than 3,000 pages. So yea i read a lot of stylez and poems. Anyway, i started to mimick them and whatever and then.....then my life actually started to suck haha....like....i was pretty sheltered, but then all of a sudden i was out into the open. Free into the world without a sheet of armor. So I became vulnerable. I wrote to comfort myself, and I wrote for reasons unknown. Later on, as I grew older, I found out that i AM a poet. It's not something I do as a hobbie, it's not something that entertains me or anything like that.....its what i AM....its a state of being for me. Its WHO i am.....javier is a POET.....so yea.... just felt like youd like to know.......i like you.....yer that first, rare strand of white hair on an ageing man. At first you're a bother to all the other hairs, but soon enuff.....they just end up becoming just like you.

Adios



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


Jose Marti
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 374
washing DC
3 posted 2000-09-10 03:17 PM


This is really good. when did you first post this? I like it a lot. I started writing for the same reason as Dopey in all honesty. I don't post many love poems now, but that the way it was. Shortly thereafter, all other manner of subjects flowed, santeria, being mulatto, being hispanic, being a political exile, fantasy, ect
StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
4 posted 2000-09-10 04:21 PM


I remember this one Anomaly! What a wonderful post! So much emotion. The descriptions are great.You are very talented. Keep it up my friend!!
Love Always
~*~Jessica~*~
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   If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm.  



[This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 09-10-2000).]

Jenn Cirrincione
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since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107
Fl
5 posted 2000-09-10 06:53 PM


Wow, I must say impressive. Interesting format, and concepts. Good work.
Jenn

anomaly187
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 284
San Francisco,CA,US
6 posted 2000-09-10 08:57 PM


thank you all for your amazing replies..

dope-i truly treasure your compliments more than anything in the world..i usually really dislike my work but whenever you give praise i feel better about it...whenever i show it to my friends..occassionally..i don't feel as though they really like it so it brings be down...but yes you are a true poet and i'd like to think of myself as one..either now or in the future...as to me reminding you of yourself...(not to be arrogant lol) great minds think alike.

Now night arrives with her purple legions
Retire now to your tents & to your dreams
Tomorrow we enter the town of my birth
I want to be ready. - JM

Dopey Dope
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since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico
7 posted 2000-09-10 10:24 PM


Anomaly, shhhhhhhhh don't say im a great mind. Most people in this forum dislike me. I think it's because i'm honest. Anyway, I'll be posting up more work and soon enuff i'll be entering my 10th grade work. I think in about 4 days or so. I'll inform you which is the first 4th wave poem. Anyway, once again.....the poem was great and you know what? YOU bring me up, like I bring you up. I have gotten e-mails from members of this forum just yelling at me, telling me that I shouldnt question their poems. All i do is try to probe within the MEANING of the poem and they take it as a direct insult that i delve within the core of the meaning rather than just say "GREAT WORK!" and continue on with my life.
Dude i dont know. Sometimes I just get fet up with how people react towards my ways. Obviously I won't stop being me! HAHA! OH WELL!!!!!!!!! You keep me up, don't ever just decide to leave this place without telling me dude, ok? OK! BYE!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


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