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Deranger
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0 posted 2000-09-09 08:17 PM



Counterfeit King

You bled through the lies,
And with your defiance, you strive,
To see a moment of truth,
In your lifetime of lies,

With a heavy sigh,
You look up and wonder “Why?”,
We’re put here just to cheat and lie,
Just to wake up, only to die,

You look to the heavens,
And hear the sweet bull sing,
God save the Counterfeit King,
Yeah, God save the Counterfeit King,

Lay awake and wonder,
Why they all had to die,
Your Dreams and friends,
Or why you’d spend,
You’re whole life wading through this bull’s wave,
Just to slip in the undertow of God Saves,
Yeah God’s slaves…

You avoid the burial mound,
Just to wake up and drown in this bull you’ve found,
You’ve been going the wrong way on the path of life,
But can you turn around?  Before it’s too late,
Before your life’s better off erased?

Laced up in madness,
You’re tied up in sadness,
You’d like to jump, yeah,
But it’s too far to the top,
But then again,
It’s sure a good day for a drop,

You look to the heavens,
And hear the sweet bull ring,
God save the Counterfeit King,
Yeah, God save the Counterfeit King,

Yeah, lay awake and wonder,
Wonder what this day will bring,
Yeah, is it even worth entering,
This world, so cruel,

You curse up the heavens,
And feel the fire rain,
Yeah, I think I’m insane,
Yeah, better of a little unsane.  
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Um those "bull"s are supposed to be Bulls**t...but well, you know the rules...

I have got to get some more Altoids....



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anomaly187
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 284
San Francisco,CA,US
1 posted 2000-09-09 11:24 PM


great poem man..i really loved it...i'd like to be insane...the world might pass me by without even noticing..

Now night arrives with her purple legions
Retire now to your tents & to your dreams
Tomorrow we enter the town of my birth
I want to be ready. - JM

Dopey Dope
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2 posted 2000-09-10 12:42 PM


I liked it, I think it would make a good song. i dont know.....i just thought the whole poem had this musical kick butt touch to it. I loved the wording. And plus the "counterfiet king"....i love that whole concept...keep it up bud



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
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3 posted 2000-09-10 03:25 PM


LOL Deranger..."I have to get more altoids"...Are you addicted to those things???You crack me up...Just dont take to many...OK...Cause then you might need to get your stomach pumped...Or they just might give you some charcoal water (yuck!!!)...SO becareful...Dont say you werent warned...LOL Keep up the good work buddy!!!

~*YoU cAn CoMpLaIn CuZ rOsEs HaVe ThOrNs Or ReJoIcE cUz ThOrNs HaVe RoSeS*~


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