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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI 
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She gazes outside through the glass, past the swaying trees at the falling rain Rain as cold as the tears on her cheeks She weeps, without a sound not knowing exactly why And yet she cries with every small tear falling slowly, slowly Slowly down her soft face And then he comes He sees her sitting so quietly all alone with no one No one to wipe her tears away He sits beside her She is still looking forward staring at the rain and nothing else He brushes away her falling tears with a gentle hand She takes her gaze off the pouring rain and fixes it upon him He leans in and embraces her in love The rain stops falling The heavens open up and the sun shines through littering their faces with streaks of light She smiles, and again begins to cry But these tears are not of sadness; they are pure and filled with joy. Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll land among the stars. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
HEy!!!!!! Yes well for some odd reason i had a very vivid picture in my head of what was going on while reading this. It was so sad at first but then happy in the end. Nice poem cutie pie mamasita.....keep it up.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
i loved it!.you really used great imagery..i look foward to furthur posts. Now night arrives with her purple legions Retire now to your tents & to your dreams Tomorrow we enter the town of my birth I want to be ready. - JM |
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Lucius Cade Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 235Saskatchewan |
Great work, I liked this one. I think this poem would sound especially good read aloud. Lucidity is the answer to all problems |
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Virgin Suïcide Member
since 2000-08-11
Posts 319Netherlands |
ohw...I just love this one! so dreamy.... love, Virgin Suïcide I dream about how it's gonna end Approaching me quickly Living a life of fear I only want my mind to be clear... ~*~silverchair, suicidal dream~*~ |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Thank you all. I beg of you, please do not just praise my poetry but give me ways I can make it better!! Thank you again. I hope this is not all that have read my poem... ~carly Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll land among the stars. |
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