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You Are Just a State of Mind
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You Are Just a State of Mind |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
well i don't exactly feel great about this poem i wrote but i just decided to post anyway so here you go. as the snake slivers down from the blood stained fields the mother and her lover are eating the feed and the mice look confused and scatter to heal you pray for mitigation cause you hate to bleed well there's a pricetag blooming over your head with the highest bid you get to spread your legs when social development is such a bore you snake slivers down for a taste of more nothing can stop this chain nothing to me you say nothing replaces this pain i love to droun in rain the air is so solid and hard to get down freezing in a pool of blood, hit by something round mentality is the weapon of choice wouldn't you love it if i were devoiced nothing but a cut and a sore nothing loved but of a whore nothing exists yet strangely i see the man kills me..even without a fee 'the night whispers tragedy over the dead wind the vacant mind stirs within its painful void blackness creeps within your diseased stricken body and there's still nothing more beautiful than you there's nothing more beautiful than your demise' You are just a state of mind. Now night arrives with her purple legions Retire now to your tents & to your dreams Tomorrow we enter the town of my birth I want to be ready. - JM |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
You know......i have to say that i love your style of poetry. I look forward to whenever you post up. keep posting!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Lani_DarkOne Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 152UK |
I agree..your style of writing is brilliant..this is pretty deep stuff, I can sense some dark undertone..the imagery you use is 'great'( I hate that word but love to use it ..  )I genuinely look forward to reading your other poems..  "Controlling my feelings for too long.... And forcing our darkest souls to unfold... And pushing us into self-destruction...." *~Muse*~ |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Once again, you make my soul shiver with the words you use and the manner you use them in. I love your style, it is so deep and passionate. I look forward to reading more of your work. Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll land among the stars. |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
wow well i really did not expect you guys to like my writing so much..well that's where self-depreciation gets you..thank you. Now night arrives with her purple legions Retire now to your tents & to your dreams Tomorrow we enter the town of my birth I want to be ready. - JM |
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