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qtpieelmo
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since 2000-07-04
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Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY

0 posted 2000-09-08 08:22 PM


K indness is in you smile,
E verytime we laugh at nothing for a while.
I n my mind I can see,
T ogether, forever, you & me.
H ow I wish I was with you now.

D on't see how I could live without.
A lone, & lifeless I would feel.
V ividly hoping our love is real.
I love you with every breath I take.
D eeply thinking of you every minute I'm awake.

B efore us my heart never knew,
E very feeling I could have for you.
C uddling close all night long
K eep wondering if we really belong.
E veryday my love continues to grow,
R eaching out so you will know.

~If you read the 1st letter of every line it spells out my boyfriends name, cute huh?  ~

LOVE ELMO


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Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
1 posted 2000-09-08 09:29 PM


Elmo~~~I tried to do this with other things but it didnt work out as well as it did with you...This was really cute though...Your boyfriend sounds like a really good guy...Keep up the good work!!!

~*YoU cAn CoMpLaIn CuZ rOsEs HaVe ThOrNs Or ReJoIcE cUz ThOrNs HaVe RoSeS*~


qtpieelmo
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since 2000-07-04
Posts 989
Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY
2 posted 2000-09-08 09:34 PM


Yea thanx erin this one took me a little longer to write than most of my poems. Usually my poems take no more than 5 minutes to write. can u tell? lol Yea he is great most of the time. I feel very safe with him, but at times he can be a lil too protective & a lil too jealous. but i'm glad u liked it   LOVE ELMO <3
Dopey Dope
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3 posted 2000-09-08 11:03 PM


Yea GREAT POEM!!!! yea hi, i knew a guy who was a lil too protective and a lil too jealous with his girlfriend. Know what happened to him? He got dumped after a 2yr relationship while he was very much in love with her. She was his everything. My advice.....urge your boyfriend to tune down a bit. Even though it starts off harmless, it gets a bit annoying, and inevitably it just ruins the whole shabang. Believe me, the guy i knew is in shambles because of it. Just trying to help cuz this little thing could errupt into hell. yea, so ok! Good luck with the relationship and all!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
4 posted 2000-09-09 08:52 AM


This is beautifully penned Elmo. The style you've written is called an "Acrostic" poem, and you've mastered it wonderfully ... well done!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

qtpieelmo
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since 2000-07-04
Posts 989
Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY
5 posted 2000-09-10 09:22 AM


Yea thanx Dopey Dope, he has tried so hard not to, because i said sumpthin about it & i definatly noticed a big change. he is 8 years older than me so he knows a lil bit more than me & he went through the college experience already (which i am now) & he knows the stuff he did there & doesnt want me to make the same mistakes Anyway thanx every1   LOVE ELMO <3
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