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A Death Re-run
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A Death Re-run |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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Yes well here is another one of my 3rd Batch poems. I like the style of this poem. I wrote it on a napkin while i was at some resteraunt. A Death Re-run: Hungry for logic Starving for reason Dying Dead. It's all become a part of me. Alone at last. The visibility of eternity guides my path. The crossroads of existence Make me delusional with life. I sleep to dream And awaken to die once again.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Im not sure if I understand this one, but I am gonna take a guess...Sounds to me like you are talking about being awake is like dying and sleeping is the only way to live...I dont know though it was just a guess... ~*YoU cAn CoMpLaIn CuZ rOsEs HaVe ThOrNs Or ReJoIcE cUz ThOrNs HaVe RoSeS*~ |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
I must say, all I can think about is what Erin said, I agree with her. I think that when I am awake, I feel so all alone within a sea of faces...it's all so unclear to me when I'm awake, I feel as though I am dead. But when I sleep, I am so alive and everything that was once unclear becomes painfully clear. but once again, I am only guessing. I like that in your work, it usually always leaves me guessing. Nice work!! < !signature-->Love Always ~*~Jessica~*~  If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm. [This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 09-08-2000).] |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
i'm not gonna analyze this poem because to me it just isn't needed..your words flow beautifully throughout the poem..this one really just hits home with me. Now night arrives with her purple legions Retire now to your tents & to your dreams Tomorrow we enter the town of my birth I want to be ready. - JM |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Yes i like to leave gaps within the poem so the reader can interpret what he/she would like. Obviously it'd be great to grasp the main meaning, but if not, i don't mind. I write for myself, so as long as it makes sense to me then i am ok! But yea, im glad you all likezzzz |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
......................................... Silence is the only way to express my thoughts. ~carly Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll land among the stars. |
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