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ILoveSrfrs
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since 1999-11-14
Posts 69
California

0 posted 2000-09-07 07:19 PM


Hey, I'm back! This poem is inspired by my ex and the slow realization that every girl that has ever been in love with him has been suicidal at one point. There's food for thought.
Rip it up.
-x-
mf

he is a mystery boy
reserved in a corner, a backhand tatooed on his cheek.
he finger-paints with blue blood that he stole from virgin smiles.
he is the one who will never change, and force-fed you with monolouges about ciggarette butts and splashing in puddles.

he is not a rock star.
  (a guitar pick in your mouth won't make people like you)
inhale his salt water cologne and you are a shadow,
just another girl with a swollen mouth
haunted by his hollow voodoo eyes

he branded the girls he cheated with suicide on their foreheads
and pushed them down wrist-first, on dirty bathroom floors.  

poor boy, he will make you cry.
he'll bruise your ears with bitterness
thinking about his lazy haircut will lay trackmarks on your arms

he'll make you nocturnal. stitching up your thigh at night with red leather thread.
you'll adore him; you'll abhor him.
his toxic body dancing on your back. he will break your spine.

he is the **** you masochivst painkiller boy.
making you fatal one phone call at a time.

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Member Patricius
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San Juan, Puerto Rico
1 posted 2000-09-07 08:15 PM


the style of this poem really moved me. I loved it. The poem in itself was so deep. I like the wording, like.....uh.....TONS! Id like to see more from you.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
2 posted 2000-09-08 04:51 PM


I hope that you werent suicidal over him...Were you???You wrote a really good poem...

Thats messed up on how a guy can make alot of girl try to commit suicide...

Keep up the good work!!!


~*YoU cAn CoMpLaIn CuZ rOsEs HaVe ThOrNs Or ReJoIcE cUz ThOrNs HaVe RoSeS*~


anomaly187
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 284
San Francisco,CA,US
3 posted 2000-09-09 11:41 PM


great work..dysfunctional guy..heh well i hope to see more from you.

Now night arrives with her purple legions
Retire now to your tents & to your dreams
Tomorrow we enter the town of my birth
I want to be ready. - JM

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