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How could You? (Please Read) |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden 
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How many times have I heard you say, you loved me each and everyday. How many times have you said to me, to let it go, I need to be free. How many times have we talked for hours, about nothing, not even life or flowers. How many times have I said to you, I don't know what I am going to do. How many times have you comforted me, when you could have just let me be. How many times have I just sat on the phone, listening to you breathe when I'm alone. How many times have I wanted something more, because there's something there that i adore. How many times have I thought this was the same, that I was just wrapped up in love's game. How many times did I tell you things and you just sat there, thoughts did bring. How many times have you told me you understand, and you'll be there forever to hold my hand. How many times have I though you should, understand, but you never could. How many times have I been left with nothing to do, I thought you understood, but how could you. --------------------------------------------------- Hey people. How are you all? It's freezing again. But only to me. Bye. Allysa Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see. |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
Allysa, this is very nice. I'm not good at rhyming but you did an excellent job at keeping the scheme going. I know what you mean when you are talking to someone who really doesn't have the foggyest understanding of what your going through. They say they do, because they want to help, but really how could they? jason  Just as soon as I belong, then it's time I disapear... -Metallica- |
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luvnkris Member
since 2000-08-31
Posts 144Perth, Australia |
hey, that is a really good poem! and its really sad too. it reminded me the relationship i had with my x-boyfriend and when he dumped me i just sat there wondering what i had done, and how he could do that after all that we had been through. anyways it really touched me!  luv ya! Jo xoxox * reach into that heart of yours, don't ignore the dream * |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Damn girl whats going on???It sounds like you are having some problems...If you ever need to talk you can e-mail me if you want...But about the poem...Sounds like you just poured out all of your feelings...I know whats its like to have the world in your hands and the next day its just gone...I was with my best (guy) friend but little did I know he was in love with my best (girl) friend...To make a long story short...He broke my heart for 5 minutes with her!!!Keep up the good work...Sorry I rambled on and on...  ~*YoU cAn CoMpLaIn CuZ rOsEs HaVe ThOrNs Or ReJoIcE cUz ThOrNs HaVe RoSeS*~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
The poem was great. I liked it a lot. Keep writing. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Jacman: they never do understand, do they? Or maybe some situations are reversed and I'm the confused one. luvnkris: thanks for replying. I'm glad you were touched. ERIN: Thanks for replyin'. maybe I'll e mail ya someday soon. sorry if i bin actin' like a *****, i didn't mean ta if i did. you don't ramble. i'd love ta here your story, i'll e mail you. Dopey: thanks for replying. I hope to post more soon. Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see. |
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miriam Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 323glendale,ca. |
how many times have I let you in my heart, Just for you to come and break it apart? You've said you loved me in so different ways, But at the end you never did stay. I loved you more than I can explain, At the end all you gave me was pain. I need to move on find someone new, But all I can do is think about you. ~guess were on the same boat Allysa....liked your poem a lot. miriam miriam coronado |
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UNC STAR Member
since 2000-06-19
Posts 67Hinesville,Ga,USA |
that was an awesome poem. i am new, check me out i like the way you write your poems. |
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