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Silent soul
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0 posted 2000-09-06 06:27 PM


Whose life does she see
Everytime she goes to bed at night
None of them are dreams she wants to dream
but instead are nightmares she dreams would leave

These dreams she ahs are but nothing of dying and death
like say of the time a house was on fire
and how this person in the house she couldnt save
so the person ended up dying
but in the dream no one could figure out who the person was!

or of the time she was swimming at a hotel
and someone jumped in and couldnt swim
so the person drowned
all the people around didnt bother to help the person
and the girl couldnt swim to save the person

A dream she had a couple of nights ago
while she was walking down a road at night
all of a sudden two cars crashed together
she ran to save the people
but only one person was in either car
and that person she couldnt get to
even though the car wasnt turned upside down or smashed at all
the person died

So what do these dreams mean
and who is the person dying in every one
are these dreams she keeps having
a reality that might actually happento someone, and if so who?
The person she found at is.......

There will be a part 2 as soon as I finish it and I only have two lines started! tell me what ya think!



peace <3
Silent
Life is to short to be pissed off all the time



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LoveBug
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1 posted 2000-09-06 09:38 PM


This is some great storytelling, my friend. I can't wait for part 2!!  

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea

Kit McCallum
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2 posted 2000-09-07 06:08 AM


You've left us dangling in anticipation Silent Soul ... a nicely told story so far ... I'll watch for part two!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

[This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 09-07-2000).]

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3 posted 2000-09-07 01:57 PM


CAN'T WAIT TO SEE PART 2!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


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