Teen Poetry #3 |
The Lie |
sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
I see your face And you're gone I feel your warmth And I'm cold I feel your love And I am empty I feel your joy And sadness consumes me I feel your touch And it's gone I see your eyes But it's just a memory I hear your words I hear your promises "I'll never leave you" But it was all a lie ~*~SCG~*~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
I am pleased that this is not about you... (from your other poem) but great sentiments... regards O sweet Lavada Sudhir |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Thanks Sudhir, and I'm not as sweet as you think LOL Just kidding ~*~SCG~*~ "Poetry is what makes the invisible appear"-Author Unknown |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
SCG~~~I like this one!!!It was really good... I cant wait to read your other poem now!!! ~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~ |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Thanks ERIN, I appreciate your reply! ~*~SCG~*~ "Poetry is what makes the invisible appear"-Author Unknown |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful contracts Lavada ... very well done the powerful back and forth motion in this! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
I loved this Vada...very nicely writ I must say! Short but full of emotion. You can practicly picture them, well I have imagination for emotions I guess. Great job Salma PS Check ICQ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Very nicely written, I like it |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Thanks Salma, Kit, and Lakewalker! All your replies are appreciated! Salma: Sorry it's short! I'll make a long one for ya if you want me to! |
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