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sweetcollege_girl
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since 1999-12-03
Posts 872
just about where I want to be

0 posted 2000-09-05 11:04 AM


I see your face
And you're gone
I feel your warmth
And I'm cold

I feel your love
And I am empty
I feel your joy
And sadness consumes me

I feel your touch
And it's gone
I see your eyes
But it's just a memory

I hear your words
I hear your promises
"I'll never leave you"
But it was all a lie

~*~SCG~*~

© Copyright 2000 Lavada Miller - All Rights Reserved
Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
1 posted 2000-09-05 11:27 AM


I am pleased that this is not about you... (from your other poem) but great sentiments...

regards O sweet Lavada
Sudhir

sweetcollege_girl
Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872
just about where I want to be
2 posted 2000-09-05 11:45 AM


Thanks Sudhir, and I'm not as sweet as you think     LOL Just kidding  


~*~SCG~*~

"Poetry is what makes the invisible appear"-Author Unknown

Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
3 posted 2000-09-05 11:49 AM


SCG~~~I like this one!!!It was really good... I cant wait to read your other poem now!!!

~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~


sweetcollege_girl
Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872
just about where I want to be
4 posted 2000-09-05 11:54 AM


Thanks ERIN, I appreciate your reply!    


~*~SCG~*~

"Poetry is what makes the invisible appear"-Author Unknown

Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
5 posted 2000-09-05 07:23 PM


Wonderful contracts Lavada ... very well done the powerful back and forth motion in this!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Salooma
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since 2000-01-28
Posts 781

6 posted 2000-09-05 10:21 PM


I loved this Vada...very nicely writ I must say! Short but full of emotion. You can practicly picture them, well I have imagination for emotions I guess. Great job  

Salma
PS Check ICQ  

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
7 posted 2000-09-06 02:58 PM


Very nicely written, I like it
sweetcollege_girl
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since 1999-12-03
Posts 872
just about where I want to be
8 posted 2000-09-06 07:49 PM


Thanks Salma, Kit, and Lakewalker! All your replies are appreciated!

Salma: Sorry it's short! I'll make a long one for ya if you want me to!  



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