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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden 
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My hands are freezing, I shut the car door. Lonely, am I, now that you are no more. So cold, am I, and nothing I can do. I get cold when I'm nervous, and I really miss you. I say goodbye to jamie, he's been a friend to the end. He know's everything, you were my best friend. I told you things, that even he didn't know. And he never could believe, that you had let me go. You brought a smile to my face, and then tears to my eyes. I was taking off the mask, my only disguise. I don't understand, you said I never could. But I try so hard, you said that I should. I should try to understand, when you will be back. ANd all of the things, that you think you lack. But forever I said, and forever is true. There's one person I love, and that person is you. --------------------------------------------------- So cold. So freakin' cold. But I'm back. And it's so freakin' cold. I'm sitting in my room, and it's really warm, but I'm so freakin' cold. I guess that's what happens when i get all weird and junk. So bye all! Allysa And please reply. I think this is for Justin. Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see. |
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Jenabou Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 215Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA |
this was really good. but also quite sad..........i get cold when i get nervous/upset and stuff too. i can totaly relate to this great work keep smiling  Love Ya Bunches ~Jen~  The world is like a mirror; frown at it, and it frowns at you. Smile and it smiles, too Be kind,for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Im really glad that you are still writing after all you went through...Seems like you are kinda upset about it still...Dont worry January is right around the corner!!!Till then keep up the good work!!! ~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~ |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Jen: Thanks for replying. ERIN: Hey, whatever happened to "You shouldn't have to wait till January", "If you want to be with him, tell him" and "you should go out with other people and then pick it back up in January"? I'm confused now, but grateful because if I told him how I feel right now, he'd probably just get all like well, my life is screwed up too, which is how I shoulds been when he was telling me about his screwed up life. If all those comments weren't yours, I'm sorry, but that's what I've been getting and I'm really hyper after yet another day of Algebra and all that. So don't mean to be all snobby or nothin cause that's not me. Bye Bye Allysa LaLaLaLaLaLaLaLaLa Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Allysa: As I said before I really can't give advice on this. The poem is great though, very good use of emotion. And there's nothing wrong with algebra, espescially if you're good at it  |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
It's amazing how that cold can make hte entire body hate itself and the mind that controls it. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Lakewalker: Thanks for replying. I enjoy getting replys. thank you much. Jeremy:Thanks for replying, it is odd how being cold does strange things. Esp. when you're freezing and it 87 degrees. Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see. |
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