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hoppy Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 271 |
Here is a little poem that i just spouted off a few mintues ago. It pretty much says it all. Do read and try to enjoy. the pain is so intense like nothing i've felt not knowing how to deal i sit here wishing still that i hadn't a heart so fragile pleading that i knew how to show you the truth only knowing that it's missing it swells up from within i'm afraid of what it is even though i must begin i wish to tell you secrets reveal things yet untold my heart bears wittness to lives that are broke i can't make this easy it won't go away trying to ignore it i've only gone insane please give me a moment just a second of your time I'd like to tell you once about this feeling of mine i know it's abtruse I realize you don't care and i don't know how to say it could you please just see that there's more than this look deeper and try to find me 9/3/00 --Hoppy There's a fine line between genius and insanity. I have erased this line. -- Oscar Levant "Death is not the greatest loss in life. The greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live." |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Well done Hoppy! You've expressed the want and need to have others look deeper, very well ... I really enjoyed this (and PS ... we care!) Great writing, keep it up!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Wow, this was great. You just came up with this quick? It flowed great when I read it and the meaning is so deep. Great job  ! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Great job!!! I know how frustrating it is to ask that someone really understand our inner feelings. But in the end, even if they say they do, other people will never really realize or understand what we feel inside. As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Hoppy~~~You expressed yourself really good...And the poem is perfect!!!Keep up the good work... ~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~ |
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hoppy Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 271 |
thanks for all the replies. Like to know that someone has read There's a fine line between genius and insanity. I have erased this line. -- Oscar Levant "Death is not the greatest loss in life. The greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live." |
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hoppy Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 271 |
thanks for all the replies. Like to know that someone has read There's a fine line between genius and insanity. I have erased this line. -- Oscar Levant "Death is not the greatest loss in life. The greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live." |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
What a wonderful plea for people to look deeper! You worded this one well! Keep it up! Love Always ~*~Jessica~*~ ~*~If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm.:)~*~ |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
This is fantastic! It's nice to read your poetry again, I don't think I've seen much from you in a while. Thought provoking words! *~Meredith~* I'll just keep on laughing, Hiding the tears in my eyes... *Oleander |
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luvnkris Member
since 2000-08-31
Posts 144Perth, Australia |
thats a really great poem i wish i was as talented as you! * reach into that heart of yours, don't ignore the dream thats calling the spirit moving through you now * |
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