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StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
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Colorado

0 posted 2000-09-03 03:37 PM




Everything you are
Is everything to me
Your heart your soul
All mean the world to me
More than words can say
More than eyes can see
You are everything to me
My heart and soul
Is yours to keep forevermore
So please be kind
And remember that it's fragile
It's been broken before
But you I trust
I know you'll be kind
You'll be there throughout
The rest of time
Just remember this one
little thing before I
say ok...

Everything you are...
Is everything to me



~*~Just a little something to proclaim my boredom...I whipped it up in about 4 minutes to be exact. Feel free to rip it apart, I know it's not great, just some random thoughts~*~


~*~If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm.:)~*~

© Copyright 2000 Jessica Lynn - All Rights Reserved
Jacman
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since 2000-06-27
Posts 291
Dwight Il, US
1 posted 2000-09-03 04:39 PM


Gee-wizz Jess, don't sell yourself so short!  This is a beautiful little poem.  The truth is usually what we just blurt out of our mouths.  I wish someone would write sentiments like this for me.  Keep it up.

JASON

Just as soon as I belong, then it's time I disapear...
-Metallica-

Isabel Galaxia
Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733

2 posted 2000-09-03 06:38 PM


Jess- Hey!!!  Thatwas great!  I can't believe that only took 4 minutes, I envy you girl!  I'm so glad things seem to be going good for you, at least in this subject.  Write me soon please.  Keep writing!
Bel
  


Beautiful is empty
Beautiful is free
Beautiful loves no one
Beautiful stripped me
-"Beautiful" CREED

StarPryncess17
Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
3 posted 2000-09-03 07:50 PM


Hey guys! thanks so much
You are way too nice! But
I appreciate it!! I love
reading replies to my work
It makes me feel good, even
on the not-so-great pieces.
Love you both!!
Love Always
~*~Jess Girl~*~

~*~If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm.:)~*~

Deranger
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since 2000-05-10
Posts 498
Somewhere, between here and there
4 posted 2000-09-03 10:51 PM


4 minutes?  Whoa, I can eat a lot of Altoids in four minutes, and slam back some Mountain Dew® too.  

It’s got a nice beat to it, I feel like singing!  ALALALALALALALABLAHBANANAH

Yummy work.  


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Spreading insanity, one post at a time

“Writing about darkness comes easily for me. I just close my eyes and write what I

StarPryncess17
Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
5 posted 2000-09-03 11:26 PM


Deranger~about 30 altoids on a good day...right?!?! hehe...and abuot 4 cans of Mountain Dew? LoL you are soo funny! damn dewd. Thanks for the laughs! Love ya bunches! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~

~*~If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm.:)~*~

Erin
Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
6 posted 2000-09-04 03:53 AM


Jessica~~~I would really love to see something that took you 15 minutes to write!!!This is just beautiful...You have a way with words...Just like Jason said dont sell yourself short...You are very talented and this proves it...4 minutes...I bet thats a record...It is for me!!!Keep up the good work!!!

~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~


Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
7 posted 2000-09-04 08:19 AM


You've written some lovely sentiments here in record time, Jess!  Very nice!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Acies
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since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665
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8 posted 2000-09-04 12:02 PM


that only makes me feel bad about myself.  4 minutes, and you whip out a poem just like that.  I'm jealous....I guess some people just have the talent for it.  It takes me like hours and hours to make one  

As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

StarPryncess17
Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
9 posted 2000-09-04 02:49 PM


What flattering comments guys! You're soo sweet! What would I do with out you all!?!!?

Erin~ "A Lesson Unlearned" took me about 20. haha. and I think you're right, 4 minutes probably is my record...but hey, who's counting..?

Kit~ Thanks so much for the kind and encouraging words!

Acire~ Do not feel bad. Because what takes me 4 minutes, takes only four minutes, I don't capture everything I should or even could. Your writing is much more deep and thought provoking. Don't be jealous and don't de discouraged either, everyone has their own standards and time minimals...
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~*~If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm. ~*~

[This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 09-04-2000).]

Jeremy Halstead
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since 2000-06-01
Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A
10 posted 2000-09-04 05:49 PM


your little random thoughts are nice to read.
sometimes those are better than an organization of big false words...keep it up.

jeremy

"Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade."

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